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    • Today,i want to speak about a beautiful story i have read before .It was about a young man , about 19 year old, living with his sick mother whom sacrificed her life to nurture her son .
    • They were poor and his mother was working multiple jobs to get money for his son , but he have not ever considered her situation ,her tiring nor her sickness .
    • One day , the mother collapsed ,after taking her to the hospital,the doctor told the son that his mom was dying and these were her last moments .
    • When the son was sitting next his dying mother, he remembered how a bad son he had ever been , and the only thing he wanted in this moment was his mother to get better in order to compensate her for every single bad moment he had in her life .
    • All of a sudden and from nowhere, someone was in the room with them , he was a divine who told him that he could take ages from his lifespan and give them to his mother ,so she would look like as a girl in the age of 19 when she was not sick .
    • The son agreed to gave her life to his mom , so in no time the mom woke up ,and the surprise,she was a healthy beautiful girl .
    • But the divine made a big mistake which is forbidden in this kind of bargain in divine world ,he told the son that he would die in an accident after one year ,so this divine would be trying his best to cancel the bargain .
    • The mother was shocked about what had happened to her ,so his son lied and told her that he made a bargain with a divine to make her get younger , and the divine won’t hurt him as long as his mother is happy and achieving her dreams .
    • For her son safety, she came back to college where her son was studying and began to study with him because this was her dream to study with her own son .
    • The story continues, and we will figure out what will happen to the son ,is he going to cancel this bargain and let his mother die or he will die rather than her , how this 53 year old mother could get along with her young classmates and is her secret would still hidden, are this mother and son will live with each other or someone would die ,and other interesting events .

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  • 문장 1
    • Today,i want to speak about a beautiful story i have read before .It was about a young man , about 19 year old, living with his sick mother whom sacrificed her life to nurture her son .
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    • Today,i I want to speak about a beautiful story iI have read before . It was about a young man , about 19 years old, living with his sick mother, whom sacrificed her life to nurture her son .
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  • 문장 2
    • They were poor and his mother was working multiple jobs to get money for his son , but he have not ever considered her situation ,her tiring nor her sickness .
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    • They were poor, and his mother was working multiple jobs to get money for his son , but he have not s never considered her situation , her tiring nfatigue, or her sickness .
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  • 문장 3
    • One day , the mother collapsed ,after taking her to the hospital,the doctor told the son that his mom was dying and these were her last moments .
      투표하세요!
    • One day , the mother collapsed , and after taking her to the hospital, the doctor told the son that his mom was dying and these were her last moments .
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  • 문장 4
    • When the son was sitting next his dying mother, he remembered how a bad son he had ever been , and the only thing he wanted in this moment was his mother to get better in order to compensate her for every single bad moment he had in her life .
      투표하세요!
    • When the son was sitting next to his dying mother, he remembered how a bad a son he had ever been , and the only thing he wanted in this moment was for his mother to get better in order to compensate her for every single bad moment he had in her life .
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 4ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 4
  • 문장 5
    • All of a sudden and from nowhere, someone was in the room with them , he was a divine who told him that he could take ages from his lifespan and give them to his mother ,so she would look like as a girl in the age of 19 when she was not sick .
      투표하세요!
    • All of a sudden and from nowhere, someone was in the room with them , h. He was a divine who told him that he could take ages from his lifespan and give them to his mother , so she would look like as a girl in the age of 19 when she was not sick .
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  • 문장 6
    • The son agreed to gave her life to his mom , so in no time the mom woke up ,and the surprise,she was a healthy beautiful girl .
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    • The son agreed to gaive her life to his mom , so in no time the mom woke up ,and the, and  surprise, she was a healthy, beautiful girl .
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 6ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 6
  • 문장 7
    • But the divine made a big mistake which is forbidden in this kind of bargain in divine world ,he told the son that he would die in an accident after one year ,so this divine would be trying his best to cancel the bargain .
      투표하세요!
    • But the divine made a big mistake, which is forbidden in this kind of bargain in the divine world ,h. He told the son that he would die in an accident after one year , so this divine would be trying his best to cancel the bargain .
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 7ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 7
  • 문장 8
    • The mother was shocked about what had happened to her ,so his son lied and told her that he made a bargain with a divine to make her get younger , and the divine won’t hurt him as long as his mother is happy and achieving her dreams .
      투표하세요!
    • The mother was shocked about what had happened to her , so his son lied and told her that he had made a bargain with a divine to make her get younger , and the divine wouldn’t hurt him as long as his mother iwas happy and achieving her dreams .
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 8ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 8
  • 문장 9
    • For her son safety, she came back to college where her son was studying and began to study with him because this was her dream to study with her own son .
      투표하세요!
    • For her son's safety, she came back to the college where her son was studying and began to study with him because this was her dream to study with her own son .
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 9ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 9
  • 문장 10
    • The story continues, and we will figure out what will happen to the son ,is he going to cancel this bargain and let his mother die or he will die rather than her , how this 53 year old mother could get along with her young classmates and is her secret would still hidden, are this mother and son will live with each other or someone would die ,and other interesting events .
      투표하세요!
    • The story continues, and we will figure out what will happen to the son ,is he going to cancel this bargain and let his mother die, or he will he die rather than her , ?—how this 53 -year -old mother could get along with her young classmates, and is her secret would still hidden, ?—are this mother and son willgoing to live with each other, or will someone would die ,?—and other interesting events .
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