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    • FCE essey_Should we spend money on exploring space?

    • Is it worth investing money in developing space science when there is starvation, uncured diseases and other life-or-deaf issues on the Earth?
    • Some people might say that it’s better to focus on dealing with these real problems instead of spending so valuable resources on exploring space.
  • However, my answer would be positive.
    • The first and foremost reason for it is unpredictable knowledge that humanity might discover in space.
    • Astronauts might find unknown substances and life forms that will help to solve acute ecological or health problems on our planet.
    • The second reason is motivation and inspiration of the young generation.
    • Millions of kids all over the world grow up with the burning ambition to become an astronaut someday.
    • Many of them have already become scientists who make a difference in our real life today.
    • The last but not least thing that I would like to mention is spending priorities.
    • I believe that if countries have got a considered balanced budget program and they cooperate with each other, there will be opportunity to divert investments and they will find the resources for the space science.
    • In conclusion, I believe that there are many ways to cut costs but saving money by not getting new knowledge is never should be considered as one of them.

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    • Is it worth investing money in developing space science when there is starvation, uncured diseases and other life-or-deaf issues on the Earth?
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    • Is it worth investing money in developing space science when there isare starvation, uncured diseases, and other life-or-deafth issues on the Earth?
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    • Some people might say that it’s better to focus on dealing with these real problems instead of spending so valuable resources on exploring space.
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    • Some people might say that it’s better to focus on dealing with these real problems instead of spending so many valuable resources on exploring space.
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    • Astronauts might find unknown substances and life forms that will help to solve acute ecological or health problems on our planet.
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    • Astronauts might find unknown substances and life forms that will help to solve acute ecological or health problems on our planet.
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    • I believe that if countries have got a considered balanced budget program and they cooperate with each other, there will be opportunity to divert investments and they will find the resources for the space science.
      투표하세요!
    • I believe that if countries have got a considered balanced budget program and they cooperate with each other, there will be opportunityies to divert investments, and they will find the resources for the space science.
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    • In conclusion, I believe that there are many ways to cut costs but saving money by not getting new knowledge is never should be considered as one of them.
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    • In conclusion, I believe that there are many ways to cut costs, but saving money by not getting new knowledge ishould never should be considered as one of them.
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