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  • Important: please correct only grammatical mistakes and expressions that would sound strange to a native speaker’s ear; don’t correct the style because it’s hard for me to tell if the corrections are prompted by your disliking the sentence or by a genuine grammatical mistake. Thank you.
  • He told him everything.
  • He finished only at midnight.
  • Afterwards, they spent the night reading the New Machiavelli to each other until the sun started dawning on Witherspoon Hall.
  • Then, someone slid a copy of the Princetonian under the door.
  • Outside, the sparrows shook themselves dry of the morning dew and twitted joyfully at the sunrise.
  • During his last two years at Princeton, he met a hotchpotch of individuals that amused him not a little.
  • In the first place, they introduced him to certain books that belonged to a very specific type of autobiographical novel that he dubbed “quest books”.
  • In these books, the hero embarks on a quest for which he is very well prepared, but after a while realises that his skills and abilities would be better employed somewhere else, on a different mission.
    • Sinister Road and Sublime Inquest were perfect examples of this kind of books.
    • In Sinister Road, the main character, a police detective, starts by pursuing a seemingly trivial murder investigation involving two drunkards that had fought outside a bar, only to discover, as if it were by chance, a more momentous crime that consisted in a complot against the Queen.
    • The books were rubbish, but they helped him kill time during the long summers, in which he used to read them lying on a bench in some park, interrupting his reading from time to time to enjoy the sight of the sunrays dancing amongst the leaves of the centennial trees.

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    • Important: please correct only grammatical mistakes and expressions that would sound strange to a native speaker’s ear; don’t correct the style because it’s hard for me to tell if the corrections are prompted by your disliking the sentence or by a genuine grammatical mistake. Thank you.
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    • In the first place, they introduced him to certain books that belonged to a very specific type of autobiographical novel that he dubbed “quest books”.
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    • In these books, the hero embarks on a quest for which he is very well prepared, but after a while realises that his skills and abilities would be better employed somewhere else, on a different mission.
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    • In Sinister Road, the main character, a police detective, starts by pursuing a seemingly trivial murder investigation involving two drunkards that had fought outside a bar, only to discover, as if it were by chance, a more momentous crime that consisted in a complot against the Queen.
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    • In Sinister Road, the main character, a police detective, starts by pursuing a seemingly trivial murder investigation involving two drunkards that had fought outside a bar, only to discover, as if it were by chance, a more momentous crime that consisted in a comof plot against the Queen.
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    • The books were rubbish, but they helped him kill time during the long summers, in which he used to read them lying on a bench in some park, interrupting his reading from time to time to enjoy the sight of the sunrays dancing amongst the leaves of the centennial trees.
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    • The books were rubbish, but they helped him kill time during the long summers, in which when he used to read them lying on a bench in some park, interrupting his reading from time to time to enjoy the sight of the sun's rays dancing amongst the leaves of the centennial trees. ¶
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