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POLYSICS
- This October My favorite rock band, POLYSICS will come to Rock FESTIVAL "What a Wonderful World!! 13 in Okinawa.
- I couldn't go their last gig, and also I can't go..
- But, this news is exciting for me.
*Please let me know if my English is incorrect.
I want to improve my English.
*I will add the Japanese part when I have more free time.
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- This October My favorite rock band, POLYSICS will come to Rock FESTIVAL "What a Wonderful World!! 13 in Okinawa.
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- This October Mmy favorite rock band, POLYSICS will come to Rock FESTIVAL "What a Wonderful World!! '13 in Okinawa.
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- I couldn't go their last gig, and also I can't go..
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- I couldn't go their last gig, and ~~also I~~I still can't go..
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- But, this news is exciting for me.
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- Bbut, this news is exciting for me.
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- I want to improve my English.
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