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  • Social networking

  • Social networking has changed our lives in the last decade.
    • There isn’t any single inventor of this element.
    • It is the result of some inventions and technology advances.
    • 1983 is considered the official birthday of internet, the first element which allows the rest.
  • Windows Messenger is a good example of an invention in this area.
  • For the first time, it was possible to communicate in the distance with someone you wanted without paying anything extra for it.
    • Facebook was launched in 2004 and his founder, Mark Zuckerberg, has become very famous.
    • It was the first channel when everyone could publish his or her personal experiences, thoughts or other personal elements and share with almost everybody.
  • Another change came when it was possible to have smartphones, or more precisely, internet in our pockets.
    • Everyone could be aware of the notices of almost everybody and the most important: at almost everywhere.
  • All these inventions had more consequences in our lives.
  • On the one hand, it is easier and faster to became famous and to keep in contact with people.
  • On the other hand, it can become really stressful because some people spend at lot of time with it, caring for the profiles and the communication with other people.
    • Another negative effect is the increase of the loneliness.
  • Someone can have a lot of contacts and be apparently very famous at the networks but it doesn’t need to have a correspondence with the real life.

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