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  • Theme: Digital Addiction

  • Nowadays, digital devices and social media are constantly part of our routine.
    • With this full exposure, it’s natural that some issues come up just like the benefits does.
    • One of the main problems about technology is the addiction.
    • People have been spending hours and hours on social midia and playing videogames while they could spend a few of that time doing exercises or actually talking with people face to face.
    • Besides, the increase level of depression and anxiety worldwide is allarming and it’s correlated with how people are always ”happy and pretty” on social medias, which is overwhelming to real people who are daily trying to be as perfect as they are.

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    • People have been spending hours and hours on social midia and playing videogames while they could spend a few of that time doing exercises or actually talking with people face to face.
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    • People have been spending hours and hours on social miedia and playing video games while they could spend a fewhave been using part of that time doing exercises or actually talking with people face to face.
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    • People have been spending hours and hours on social miedia and playing video-games while they could spend a fewsome of that time dotaking exercises or actually talking with people face to face.
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    • Besides, the increase level of depression and anxiety worldwide is allarming and it’s correlated with how people are always ”happy and pretty” on social medias, which is overwhelming to real people who are daily trying to be as perfect as they are.
      투표하세요!
    • Besides, the all this, increaseing levels of depression and anxiety worldwide is allarming and it’s correlated with how people are always ”happy and pretty” on social medias, which. It is overwhelming tofor real people who are daily trying to be as perfect as they arcan be.
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      투표하세요!
    • BesidesAlso, the increased level of depression and anxiety worldwide is allarming and it’s correlated withs to how people are always ”happy and pretty” on social medias, which is overwhelming to reals ordinary people who are daily trying to be as perfect as they areemulate them.
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