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  • In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food.
  • It is, therefore, necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food.
  • To what extent do you agree or disagree?
    • It is true that a number of nations have health difficulties by consuming junk food nowadays.
    • There is an opinion saying that imposing fine is a relevant procedure to control the phenomena.
    • However, I disagree with the given statement because this method is capable to discourage a part of society, not whole the community.
    • A part of society claims that price plays a significant role to consume foodstuff so imposing a superior tax on junk foods indirectly incremental impacts on this kind of food cost.
    • Simply put, if the cost of junk food would become costly, a majority of people who do not have sufficient income to purchase expensive ready foods they may refuse to consume them.
    • Therefore not only consumption of unhealthy foods will decrease automatically but also governments could invest excess revenues in the other appropriate sections.
    • Take the authorities of Sweden as an obvious example; they have exposed considerable taxation on junk foods and extra income from it has invested in root ministries especially relate to community health.
    • However, I believe that taxation is just capable to solve part of this issue because fast food is considered an appropriate suitable alternative for employees who do not have sufficient time to prepare safe foods for them.
    • Another solution is that it is better to offer abundant low-priced organic foods with easily cook recipes in supermarkets or restaurants is more likely to persuade people to utilize healthy cuisine instead of purchasing unhealthy foods.
    • Simply put, availability to cook recipes is a determining factor for the individuals’ selections especially for younger generations who have a busy schedule of preparing cuisine for themselves.
    • Therefore, this alternative not only leads to increasing reluctance to eating unhealthy foods in the community but also may persuade people to purchase healthy foods more than before.
    • In conclusion, in my viewpoint governments need to invest in healthy natural foods and presenting them at affordable prices in the food sale centers for individuals who do have adequate time to cook food for them at home.

KÉRLEK, SEGÍTS KIJAVÍTANI MINDEN MONDATOT! - English

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    • A part of society claims that price plays a significant role to consume foodstuff so imposing a superior tax on junk foods indirectly incremental impacts on this kind of food cost.
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    • A part of societySome claims that price plays a significant role toin the consumeption of foodstuffs so imposing a superiohigher tax on junk foods indirectly and incrementally impacts on this kind of food cost by reducing consumption.
    • ADJ HOZZÁ EGY ÚJ JAVÍTÁST! - Mondat 7ADJ HOZZÁ EGY ÚJ JAVÍTÁST! - Mondat 7
  • Mondat 8
    • Simply put, if the cost of junk food would become costly, a majority of people who do not have sufficient income to purchase expensive ready foods they may refuse to consume them.
      Szavazz most!
    • Simply put, if the cost of junk food would becomes too costly, then a majority of people who do not have sufficient income to purchase expensive preadypared foods they maywould refuse to consume themsuch unhealthy food.
    • ADJ HOZZÁ EGY ÚJ JAVÍTÁST! - Mondat 8ADJ HOZZÁ EGY ÚJ JAVÍTÁST! - Mondat 8
  • Mondat 9
    • Therefore not only consumption of unhealthy foods will decrease automatically but also governments could invest excess revenues in the other appropriate sections.
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    • Therefore, not only consumption of unhealthy foods will decreaseould automatically decrease but also governments could invest excess gained revenues in the other appropriate sectionareas.
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  • Mondat 10
    • Take the authorities of Sweden as an obvious example; they have exposed considerable taxation on junk foods and extra income from it has invested in root ministries especially relate to community health.
      Szavazz most!
    • Take the authorities of Sweden as an obvious example; they have eximposed considerable taxationhigh taxes on junk foods and the extra income from ithis has been invested in rootcore ministries - especially related to community health.
    • ADJ HOZZÁ EGY ÚJ JAVÍTÁST! - Mondat 10ADJ HOZZÁ EGY ÚJ JAVÍTÁST! - Mondat 10
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    • However, I believe that taxation is just capable to solve part of this issue because fast food is considered an appropriate suitable alternative for employees who do not have sufficient time to prepare safe foods for them.
      100% GOOD (1 votes)
    • However, I believe that taxation is just capable toonly solves part of this issueproblem because fast food is usually considered an appropriate suitable alternative for employees who do not have sufficient time to prepare safe foods for themselves.
    • ADJ HOZZÁ EGY ÚJ JAVÍTÁST! - Mondat 11ADJ HOZZÁ EGY ÚJ JAVÍTÁST! - Mondat 11
  • Mondat 12
    • Another solution is that it is better to offer abundant low-priced organic foods with easily cook recipes in supermarkets or restaurants is more likely to persuade people to utilize healthy cuisine instead of purchasing unhealthy foods.
      Szavazz most!
    • Another and better solution is that it is better to offer abundant low-priced organic foods with easily y-to-cook recipes in supermarkets or restaurants. This is more likely to persuade people to utilize healthy cuisine instead of purchasing unhealthy foods.
    • ADJ HOZZÁ EGY ÚJ JAVÍTÁST! - Mondat 12ADJ HOZZÁ EGY ÚJ JAVÍTÁST! - Mondat 12
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    • Simply put, availability to cook recipes is a determining factor for the individuals’ selections especially for younger generations who have a busy schedule of preparing cuisine for themselves.
      Szavazz most!
    • Simply put, availabilitrecipes which are easy to cook recipes is a determining factor for the individuals’ meal selections and is especially true for younger generations who have a busy schedule of. There is little time to preparinge cuisine for themselves.
    • ADJ HOZZÁ EGY ÚJ JAVÍTÁST! - Mondat 13ADJ HOZZÁ EGY ÚJ JAVÍTÁST! - Mondat 13
  • Mondat 14
    • Therefore, this alternative not only leads to increasing reluctance to eating unhealthy foods in the community but also may persuade people to purchase healthy foods more than before.
      Szavazz most!
    • Therefore, thissuch alternatives not only leads to increasing relucsistance to eating unhealthy foods in the community but also may persuade people to purchase healthy foods more than before.
    • ADJ HOZZÁ EGY ÚJ JAVÍTÁST! - Mondat 14ADJ HOZZÁ EGY ÚJ JAVÍTÁST! - Mondat 14
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    • In conclusion, in my viewpoint governments need to invest in healthy natural foods and presenting them at affordable prices in the food sale centers for individuals who do have adequate time to cook food for them at home.
      100% GOOD (1 votes)
    • In conclusion, in my viewpoint governments need to invest in healthy natural foods and presenting them at affordable prices in theat food sale centers for individuals who do have adequate time to cook food for themselves at home. ¶
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