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• The method is used to bring up children has become one of the most significant discussions among adults.

• Some parts of society may believe that create a sense of cooperation would assist them to become helpful adults in the future, while another part of the community suppose that victory is an important section for people who want to participate in contests.

• In the one hand, some believe that competition notions should teach has pupils.

• Because it gives extra motivation to students to display their abilities in the educational background and cope with their problems alone.

• However, being self-governing can not necessarily due to success.

• Those who tend to take part in a team as a member are more likely to distinguish their hidden talents and extraordinary abilities which are useful to reach goals.

• In the one hand, the number of people believes that cooperation brings up many valuable emotions into students who tend to participate in the teams.

• Developing emotions would help individuals to better sympathetic toward the world where they live on it.

• A better understanding of the world may aid them to make suitable decisions and making reliable friendships, due to reach the satisfaction of their lives.

• Moreover, team working offers an additional chance for the younger generation to undergo various arrays from compatible to contrary viewpoints.

• These contradictions may create some challenges for pupils but during the years they attempt to adjust themselves with the new situation.

• The result of growing in the broad network people, who know each other and effort to pursue the rules of teamwork, will be responsible and sociable individuals.

• In conclusion, viewpoint of me is that, although the sense of competition can encourage children to get successful in parts of their lives, cooperation helps them to realize different opinions to improve their social personality.