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    • It is true that daily life has become different swiftly, and this tendency towards the hectic lifestyle in many parts of the world.
    • My viewpoint on this subject is that, while this conversion may have some benefits for people, we should not disregard the negative side of this trend.
    • On the plus side, there are several main reasons why the novel lifestyle can bring myriad profits to people.
    • To begin with, many parents use their house as an office so they not only access to additional time to spend it with their offspring but also can take pleasure in their work.
    • Therefore, they may release their tricky conditions from keen competitions among jobholders to employers' crass behaviors in the workplace.
    • That is to say, parents instead of focusing on their tedious status in the office, they can create a constructive conversation with their children by listening carefully to them and offer invaluable advice to them.
    • Furthermore, this lifestyle is produced by technology that provides the majority of opportunities for people who have sensitive jobs to associate with their family members.
    • On the downside, there exist several compelling causes why this new method of life which be common in some sections of the world cannot be an appropriate perspective for family.
    • First and foremost, the foundation of the household is considered a significant component in Human civilization through history but this principle has lost its meaning during recent years.
    • Simply put, a majority of individuals more dependent on technology which brings them speed life and improves their communication with other people who have various lifestyles.
    • In this situation, family connections not only become fragile but also may tear families apart.
    • Take this lifestyle in the western country consider as an example; the youth tend to spend their spare time hanging out with their friends instead of staying at home to watch television serious with their families.
    • Last not least, the modern lifestyle creates a competitive circumstance for people who have this opinion, if one wants to become victorious who should spend his own golden time either on the offices or on the projects.
    • In conclusion, however living in the technology world offers several benefits for people, we cannot neglect its negative parts.

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    • It is true that daily life has become different swiftly, and this tendency towards the hectic lifestyle in many parts of the world.
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    • It is true that daily life has swiftly become different swiftly, and thisand there is a tendency towards tha more hectic lifestyle in many parts of the world.
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  • Sentence 2
    • My viewpoint on this subject is that, while this conversion may have some benefits for people, we should not disregard the negative side of this trend.
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    • My viewpoint on this subject is that, while this conversion may have some benefits for people, we should not disregard the negative side of this trend.
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    • To begin with, many parents use their house as an office so they not only access to additional time to spend it with their offspring but also can take pleasure in their work.
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    • To begin with, many parents use their house as ans offices so they not only have access to additional time to spend it with their offspring, but can also can take pleasure in their work.
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  • Sentence 5
    • Therefore, they may release their tricky conditions from keen competitions among jobholders to employers' crass behaviors in the workplace.
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    • Therefore, they may release their tricky conditions from keen competitions among jobholders toy may therefore release themselves from undesirable conditions in the workplace, including competitive colleagues and unacceptable employers' crass behaviors in the workplace.
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  • Sentence 6
    • That is to say, parents instead of focusing on their tedious status in the office, they can create a constructive conversation with their children by listening carefully to them and offer invaluable advice to them.
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    • That is to say, parents instead of focusing on their tedious status in the office, they canParents are instead able to create a constructive conversation with their children by listening carefully to them and offer invaluable advice to them rather than focusing on their tedious status in the office.
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  • Sentence 7
    • Furthermore, this lifestyle is produced by technology that provides the majority of opportunities for people who have sensitive jobs to associate with their family members.
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    • Furthermore, tThis lifestyle is producenabled by technology thatand provides the majority of opportunities for people who have sensitive jobs to be able to associate with their family members.
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  • Sentence 8
    • On the downside, there exist several compelling causes why this new method of life which be common in some sections of the world cannot be an appropriate perspective for family.
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    • On the downside, there exists several compelling causes as to why this new method of life which be common in some sections of the world cannot be an appropriate perspective for family, even though it is common in some sections of the world.
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  • Sentence 9
    • First and foremost, the foundation of the household is considered a significant component in Human civilization through history but this principle has lost its meaning during recent years.
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    • First and foremost, tThe foundation of the household is primarily considered a significant component in Hhuman civilization through history but this principle has lost its meaning during recent years.
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  • Sentence 10
    • Simply put, a majority of individuals more dependent on technology which brings them speed life and improves their communication with other people who have various lifestyles.
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    • Simply put, aThe majority of individuals are more dependent on technology which bringincreases them speed of life and improves their communication with other people who have various lifestyles.
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    • Take this lifestyle in the western country consider as an example; the youth tend to spend their spare time hanging out with their friends instead of staying at home to watch television serious with their families.
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    • Take this western lifestyle in the western country consider as an example; tto consideration. The youth tend to spend their spare time hanging out with their friends instead of staying at home to watch television serioues with their families.
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    • Last not least, the modern lifestyle creates a competitive circumstance for people who have this opinion, if one wants to become victorious who should spend his own golden time either on the offices or on the projects.
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    • Last but not least, the modern lifestyle creates a competitive circumstance for ps. People who have thisan opinion, if one wants to of becomeing victorious who, should spend his own goldentheir precious time either onat their offices or on their projects.
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  • Sentence 14
    • In conclusion, however living in the technology world offers several benefits for people, we cannot neglect its negative parts.
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    • In conclusion, however living in the technology world does offers several benefits forto people. However, we cannot neglect its negative paraspects. ¶
    • In conclusion, howeverpeople can benefit from living in the age of technology world offers several benefits for people. But, we cannot neglect its negative partsdownside. ¶
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