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Text from azoooz111 - English

 
  • My writing

    • First, you can describe the people physically: their clothes, body shapes, and facial expressions.
    • Then you can immediately go to their actions (what they are doing) and relate it to their expressions, describe that in details, don’t miss anything.
    • Imagine the “time” of the event that is showed in the picture.
  • And as I said, focus on every detail.
  • Finally, only write what can be described from the picture and choose your words carefully.

PLEASE, HELP TO CORRECT EACH SENTENCE! - English