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A proposal: Library visitors
- First of all I would like to say that it would be a great idea to buy some new books in our library.
- There are many significant and popular modern authors in the world and people prefer to follow their new novels.
- If we can offer new publications to our visitors, they will stay with us next year.
- At the second I see a big problem with our software and our official web page.
- There are a lot of bugs and I am sure that some visitors left us due to huge troubles they had when they tried to use these services.
- In my book we should find more qualified software developers to solve these problems and make the situation better.
- Additional to the above I can say that the library is not only about books.
- In my opinion we should organize some public events such as musical concerts, lectures and exibitions.
- Doing this we can increase the amount of our visitors as well.
- To achieve this goal we can collaborate with local schools and universities in out city.
- In conclusion I have to say that the salary of our staff is not so high as excpected.
- Therefore some of our employees are not so strongly motivated to do their job well.
- I hope that you will be satisfied with my proposal and we will make all things better together.
- baltowolfMay 2019100% GOOD (1 votes)
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