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  • Lesson 3 writing 2 Some people think that the government should be responsible for crime prevention, while others believe that it is the responsibility of the individual to protect themselves.
    • Discuss both sides and give your opinion?
    • Some people believe that only governments must preserve people of crime while some other people have a different idea; they think that each one should be protecting themselves of crime.
  • I wish to discuss both viewpoints about this essay.
    • On the one hand, some people hold a view that self-protection is a more useful way to avoid of crime.
    • For instance: in some countries like Japan, China and etc offenders are not able to injure people because women and children undergo of training so they are able to preserve themselves of damages.
    • Then offenders are not able to misuse of people if people are being careful and sufficient self-confidence and awareness.
    • On the other hand, others hold opposite ideas; firstly, governments should catch offenders for protecting innocent people.
    • After that they trying to rehabilitate former prisoners back to the society in effective ways so they can be provided safely in a community.
    • Secondly, if governments resolve society's economic problems not only they are able to prevent crimes but also they can provide mental security for people because both of them connect to each other.
  • Reducing crime is very significant for creating a safe and peaceful society.
    • This essay we have discussed why persons should acquire some self-defense techniques.
    • We have also explained why government's duties are more important for reducing crimes rate.
    • In my position, if governments considered to safe society, criminals could not have detrimental behavior to other people so their role is more efficient in preventing crime and it is only delusion if we think that there are not crimes in the society, people are able to defend of themselves.

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    • Lesson 3 writing 2 Some people think that the government should be responsible for crime prevention, while others believe that it is the responsibility of the individual to protect themselves.
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    • Some people believe that only governments must preserve people of crime while some other people have a different idea; they think that each one should be protecting themselves of crime.
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    • Some people believe that only governments must preserveotect people ofrom crime while some other people have a different idea; t. They think that each persone should be protecting themselves ofrom crime.
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    • For instance: in some countries like Japan, China and etc offenders are not able to injure people because women and children undergo of training so they are able to preserve themselves of damages.
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    • For instance: iIn some cCountries like Japan, China and etc., offenders are not able to injure people because women and children undergo ofa training so they are able to preserveotect themselves of damagfrom injuries.
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    • Then offenders are not able to misuse of people if people are being careful and sufficient self-confidence and awareness.
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    • Then offenders are not able to misuse oftreat people if people athey’re being careful and have sufficient self-confidence and awareness.
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    • On the other hand, others hold opposite ideas; firstly, governments should catch offenders for protecting innocent people.
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    • On the other hand, others holdave opposite ideas; fopinions. Firstly,; governments should catchpture offenders for protecassaulting innocent people.
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    • After that they trying to rehabilitate former prisoners back to the society in effective ways so they can be provided safely in a community.
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    • After that they’re trying to rehabilitate former prisoners back into the society in effective ways so theyat can be provided safely within a community.
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    • Secondly, if governments resolve society's economic problems not only they are able to prevent crimes but also they can provide mental security for people because both of them connect to each other.
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    • Secondly, if governments resolve society's economic problems; not only will they arbe able to prevent crimes but also they can provide mental security for people because both of them connect to each other.
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    • In my position, if governments considered to safe society, criminals could not have detrimental behavior to other people so their role is more efficient in preventing crime and it is only delusion if we think that there are not crimes in the society, people are able to defend of themselves.
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    • In my positopinion, if governments considered to having a safe society, criminals could not have detrimental behavior toward other people, so their role is more efficientective in preventing crimes and it is only a delusion if we think that there are non't crimes in the society, p. People arneed to be able to defend of themselves.
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