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    • APPOLO SPACE TRAVEL

    • How did the scientific and technological discoveries made during the Cold War stimulate the conquest of space and make it possible to travel in space in 2019 for fortunate public?
    • To help illustrate this statement above, there 3 main points that i will be expanding on.
    • 1/To begin with, i am going to focus on the preparation before the departure with emphasize on the importance of human exchanges in this extraordinary experience.
    • 2/Second, i’ll move on the science-based on technology development stimulate by the cold war approach and risk of a nuclear threat with the envy (wish) of the conquest of space 3/Third, i’ll study the space interest by the artistic community open to a fortunate public looking for traveling in space on the moon.
  • To help illustrate this statement above, there 3 main points that i will be expanding on.
  • To begin with, i am going to focus on the preparation before the departure and emphasize on the importance of human exchanges in this extraordinary experience.
  • A/ Preparation before the departure -We can take the listening comprehension about an interview following the shooting of “First Man” directed by Damien Chazelle.
    • First Man was supposed to celebrate the fiftieth anniversary of neil Armstrong’s lunar landing.
    • Ryan Gosling pointed that he didn’t know how dangerous this, mission was.
  • He underlined that the exploit makes us forget that those men were human beings with families.
  • RG says in this interview that he couldn’t have guessed how important the astronaut’s families were.
  • Little did he know what important part families played.
  • He implies that their families needed to be fully supportive,courageous, patient and understanding.
  • They had to be prepared to see their privacy pried into somebody’s privacy.
    • -In opposition, we can also speak about( replace take) the song “Rocket Man” by Elton John.
  • Rocket man is an unhappy and lonely space worker.
  • He suffers from the distance and from loneliness.
  • Astronaut must be psychologically get prepared before take-off to the moon.
    • Do an atypical experience require a psychological preparation and a appropriate environment because human’s exchanges are limited in the space. the experience can generate anxiety, the scare of unknown space.
  • Behind the scenes professionals and technological staff are working as a team to participate in the space program.
  • Teamwork in that case epitomizes the notion of “Exchanges” with knowledge being shared and with cooperation and collaboration.
    • B/ About Human exchanges during the flight, First, as for as First Man Film released in 2018 : Ryan Godsling interview’ is concerned Ryan Godsling actors as Neil Amstrong said that he could’nt have guessed how important the astronaut’s families were.
  • The space program was very demanding for each families.
  • - Role of media support Then, Claire Foy also appear as Neil Armstrong ‘s Wife in this film.
    • On the one hand Media admit /say have preconived idea about space programs in article… and he wasn’t aware dangerous this mission One the other hand, media and journalists have intrusive presence into the family private leaves with harassment so much that they had to deal with everyday Science-based on technology development stimulate by the cold war approach and risk of a nuclear threat with the envy (wish) of the conquest of space In the mid-1950s, during the American-Soviet Cold War, both countries had made their way through their daily lives.
    • It reigned was a tens climate fuelled by the arms race and the growing threat of nuclear weapons, vast espionage and counter-intelligence between the two countries.
    • • Therefore technology and conquest of space begin in USA with : First, « Apollo program”: Neil Armstrong was the first man who walked on the moon the 21 of July in 1969.
  • This achievement was regarded on TV by a lot of people in the world.
    • This exploit was permit thanks to the enhancement of science more precisely with performance rocket.
    • In its heydays NASA was employing 400,000 people.
  • Then, Space Race: The USA, during the weeks before July 1961, it was the first time astronauts had flown so close to the moon.
  • People view the achievement in awe (fear, respect and amazement).
  • People were extremely impressed.
    • The USSR, in 1975, the US and Soviet Union took the chance to end the space race for good with a joint program: the apollo-Soyuz test.
  • The 2 spacecrafts docked and the astronauts inside exchanges gifts.
  • The space interest by the artistic community open to a fortunate public looking for traveling in space on the moon.
  • The artistic community had a great interest for space, especially in Space oddity by David Bowie is a song about the launch of Major Tom, a fictional astronaut and was released during a period of great interest in space flight, internet: A Japenese will be the first tourist sent around the moon by the space company “Space X”.

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    • How did the scientific and technological discoveries made during the Cold War stimulate the conquest of space and make it possible to travel in space in 2019 for fortunate public?
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    • How did the scientific and technological discoveries made during the Cold War stimulate the conquest of space and make it possible for a fortunate public to travel in space in 2019 for fortunate public?
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    • 1/To begin with, i am going to focus on the preparation before the departure with emphasize on the importance of human exchanges in this extraordinary experience.
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    • 1/To begin with, iI am going to focus on the preparation before the departure with emphasizes on the importance of human exchanges in this extraordinary experience.
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    • 2/Second, i’ll move on the science-based on technology development stimulate by the cold war approach and risk of a nuclear threat with the envy (wish) of the conquest of space 3/Third, i’ll study the space interest by the artistic community open to a fortunate public looking for traveling in space on the moon.
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    • To begin with, i am going to focus on the preparation before the departure and emphasize on the importance of human exchanges in this extraordinary experience.
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    • A/ Preparation before the departure -We can take the listening comprehension about an interview following the shooting of “First Man” directed by Damien Chazelle.
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    • Do an atypical experience require a psychological preparation and a appropriate environment because human’s exchanges are limited in the space. the experience can generate anxiety, the scare of unknown space.
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    • Does an atypical experience require a psychological preparation and an appropriate environment because human’s exchanges are limited in the space. t? The experience can generate anxiety, the scfeare of unknown space.
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    • B/ About Human exchanges during the flight, First, as for as First Man Film released in 2018 : Ryan Godsling interview’ is concerned Ryan Godsling actors as Neil Amstrong said that he could’nt have guessed how important the astronaut’s families were.
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    • On the one hand Media admit /say have preconived idea about space programs in article… and he wasn’t aware dangerous this mission One the other hand, media and journalists have intrusive presence into the family private leaves with harassment so much that they had to deal with everyday Science-based on technology development stimulate by the cold war approach and risk of a nuclear threat with the envy (wish) of the conquest of space In the mid-1950s, during the American-Soviet Cold War, both countries had made their way through their daily lives.
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    • On the one hand the Media admit /sas they have preconivedan idea about space programs in the article… and he wasn’t aware how dangerous this mission was. One the other hand, media and journalists have intrusive presence into the family private leaives with harassment so much that they had to deal with it every day.


      Science-based on technology development stimulate by the cold war approach and risk of a nuclear threat with the envy (wish) of the conquest of space¶


      In the mid-1950s, during the American-Soviet Cold War, both countries had made their way through their daily lives.
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    • It reigned was a tens climate fuelled by the arms race and the growing threat of nuclear weapons, vast espionage and counter-intelligence between the two countries.
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    • It reigned was a tense climate fuelled by the arms race and the growing threat of nuclear weapons, vast espionage and counter-intelligence between the two countries.
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    • • Therefore technology and conquest of space begin in USA with : First, « Apollo program”: Neil Armstrong was the first man who walked on the moon the 21 of July in 1969.
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      , technology and conquest of space begian in USA with :¶
      First, « Apollo program”: Neil Armstrong was the first man who walked on the moon the 21 of July in 1969.
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    • The artistic community had a great interest for space, especially in Space oddity by David Bowie is a song about the launch of Major Tom, a fictional astronaut and was released during a period of great interest in space flight, internet: A Japenese will be the first tourist sent around the moon by the space company “Space X”.
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