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    • mahsa essay for toefl ibt

    • 2018: This topic has been offered at least 4 times in the past 2 years: Imagine that you plan to donate money to charity to help people in need.
  • If you could give money to only one type of charitable organization, which one of the following would you choose and why?
  • - An organization that provides food and housing to people in need - An organization that gives people money to start their own small business - An organization that provides medical care to people in need.
    • (The Preference type, three sides of the issue should be discussed) In the wake of the humankind’s history, a life places people in the complex web of relationship with each other.
    • In the course of life, because of harsh condition, people have been waxing and wanning severely.
    • Sundry points of view which are geremane to the matter being discussed brings up to the moot question as to whether affluent people contribute their money to the charity that they need more budget in their substantial matter, the wealthy people help in their medical issue or they donate their money to establish their small bussiness.
    • The popular sentiment to which I vehemently cling is that the last one is utmost importance as well as the first and second are in the subsidiary position.
    • There are several cogent reasons elusidating my vantage point in the following statement.
    • The focal point that prompts me to hold the idea is that strength and power are the precious commodities in the society and people had better gain and intesify the power.Only by working, could people enrich the power.
    • The more power in the society, the more ability in the society.
    • Admittedly, the impoverished people are from the low stratification of the society and they need help to stand on their feet.
    • Under no circumastance could they be self-independent especially in their jobs.
    • I do adhere to the convention that the well-off people should donate their money in the way which could enrich the poor people independency.
    • Only in this way could thay stand on their feet. when thay have job, they could fortfy their lives slowly and recliam their position in the society.
    • When the distitute people do not have a job, the power of the soceity wither on the vain.
    • Take a personal experience as an example, my father is a rich man who donates his money in the charity, but he has a fundumantal policy in his bussiness.
  • It is better to err on the side of coution in trading.
    • My father invests his money for establishing the small business for people in the charity.
    • He conteds that only in this way could they believe themseleves and blossom out in their lives.
    • Although they could evolve slowly, they earn money by themlves.
    • Another equally salinet point in corroborating to my stance in this issue is that when people have a job, the society is healthier.
    • The high numbers of unemployment impringe on the society drastically.
  • Crime follows in the wake of poverty.
    • Consequently, the poverty begets the unemployment.
    • If the well-to-do people spend their money for istituting the workplace for workless poeple, they will have a job.
  • Hence, the people have the vacant, hardly do they apply criminal activities for earning money.
    • For calrifying this issue, it is better to deem the sceintific methods.
    • There is a branches in the statics is called sampling using in all scients.
    • Scholars elect a specimen which could be things or people.
  • But, the type of sample is in tie up with the kind of experimets. they experiment and cohere the result to whole things or people with the exact attribute which they have.
  • This method has been being in all the range owing to the reliable and unblemished result.
  • In this regard, the statics demonestrate that the soceity which has low percent in the unemployents is more prosperious and healtheir.
  • When wealthy people take on the mantle of helping charity, it is better to invest their money for paving the way in their jobs and assissting them to lay the foundation of their job To make a long story short, contemplating all the notion which were proposing above, one can deduce, it is needless to say thay donating the money for charity should be productive and the best way is for foundation the vacant.
  • In effect, there are several grounds supporting this notion.
  • But, I highly recommended that the society dedicate more budget for the charities beacuse it is incumbent on the society to bring up the fleddign adult in the charity perfectly and in this way the priviliged people are even the path efficiently.

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