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I've tried to write a contrast essay. Is it correct?

• The way of living in the urban areas differ from the rural areas in some ways.

• In the countryside, the pace of life is very slow, and it isn't surrounded with machines and artificial means for living, so people tend to be more relaxed.

• Whereas, the city-lived in residents always seem to be faster.

• They spend most of their time working outside in order to afford their costs.

• Urban people are engaged in non-agricultural works, such as trade, commerce or service industry.

• In contrast, the primary occupation of rural people is agriculture and animal husbandry.

• urban areas are densely populated, which is based on the urbanisation, i.e. the higher the urbanisation, the higher is the population.

• On the contrary, the rural population is sparse, which has an inverse relationship with agriculturism.

• Urban areas are developed in a planned and systematic way according to the process of urbanisation and industrialisation.

• While, development in rural areas is seldom, based on the availability of natural vegetation and fauna in the region.

• Rural areas are in the direct contact with nature and have a high quality environment including green landscape areas which provides fresh air to breath.

• Unlike the rural areas, urban areas are surrounded by many buildings and the environment is polluted by dust, smoke, garbage and carbon dioxide that can cause some health problems.

• The people who live in urban areas have a chance to get a high levels of education ,but in rural areas, children become a cost for helping work the land.

• In conclusion, both urban and rural living have their advantages and disadvantages and people can choose the appropriate way of living according to their priorities.