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  • Contemporary newspapers and TV.

    • Nowadays, in a majority of countries most of youngsters are no more use newspapers or TV programs as sources of information.
    • This trend leads to the situation when people are not aware of the events taking place in their home country and abroad.
  • Obviously, the main reason why young people do not like to watch TV or read newspapers is that this way of obtaining information is undoubtedly out of date.
    • Modern technology progress gives to humanity new opportunities to receive information from World Wide Web using smartphone or personal computer.
    • This way has a number of advantages, among which it is worth noting cheapness comparing to newspapers, absence of strict schedule comparing to TV programs and many other that attract youngster.
    • For example, it has been reported by World Press Association that more than 89% of respondents under the age of 25 give up reading newspapers or watch TV because of the Internet.
    • Without a doubt, in order to regain youth audience, the media have to adapt to modern conditions and start to use new technologies, producing content targeted on youth.
    • Newspapers could publish news on the Internet like, for instance, world-famous newspaper New York Times do.
    • Also, good example is Discovery Company.
  • Famous for producing TV programs it has its own channel on youtube.com where all programs are published free of charge.
    • In conclusion, taking into account all written above, it is clear that Internet with the advantages that it gives is the main cause why little do young people buy newspapers and watch TV.
    • Nevertheless, media could return their audience back if they will start to use new technologies and adapt to contemporary circumstances.

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    • Nowadays, in a majority of countries most of youngsters are no more use newspapers or TV programs as sources of information.
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    • Nowadays, in a majority of countries most of the youngsters are no moredon't use newspapers or TV programs as sources of information.
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    • This trend leads to the situation when people are not aware of the events taking place in their home country and abroad.
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    • This trend leads to the situation whenre people are not aware of the events taking place in their home country and abroad.
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  • 문장 3
    • Obviously, the main reason why young people do not like to watch TV or read newspapers is that this way of obtaining information is undoubtedly out of date.
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    • Modern technology progress gives to humanity new opportunities to receive information from World Wide Web using smartphone or personal computer.
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    • Modern technologyical progress gives to humanity new opportunities to receive information from World Wide Web using smartphones or personal computers.
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  • 문장 5
    • This way has a number of advantages, among which it is worth noting cheapness comparing to newspapers, absence of strict schedule comparing to TV programs and many other that attract youngster.
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    • This way has a number of advantages, among which it is worth noting cheapness comparinged to newspapers, the absence of a strict schedule comparinged to TV programs and many others that attract youngsters.
      100% GOOD (1 votes)
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  • 문장 6
    • For example, it has been reported by World Press Association that more than 89% of respondents under the age of 25 give up reading newspapers or watch TV because of the Internet.
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    • For example, it has been reported by World Press Association that more than 89% of respondents under the age of 25 give up reading newspapers or watching TV because of the Internet.
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  • 문장 7
    • Without a doubt, in order to regain youth audience, the media have to adapt to modern conditions and start to use new technologies, producing content targeted on youth.
      투표하세요!
    • Without a doubt, in order to regain a youth audience, the media have to adapt to modern conditions and start to use new technologies, producing content targeted ton youth.
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    • Newspapers could publish news on the Internet like, for instance, world-famous newspaper New York Times do.
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    • Newspapers could publish news on the Internet like, for instance, the world-famous newspaper New York Times does.
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    • Famous for producing TV programs it has its own channel on youtube.com where all programs are published free of charge.
      투표하세요!
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    • In conclusion, taking into account all written above, it is clear that Internet with the advantages that it gives is the main cause why little do young people buy newspapers and watch TV.
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    • In conclusion, taking into account alleverything written above, it is clear that Internet with the advantages that it gives is the main cause why little dofew young people buy newspapers and watch TV.
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    • Nevertheless, media could return their audience back if they will start to use new technologies and adapt to contemporary circumstances.
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    • Nevertheless, media could rgeturn their audience back if they will start to use new technologies and adapt to contemporary circumstances. ¶
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