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Crime

• Crime is a serious problem in the most countries.

• So governments have decided reduce the number of crimes in their countries.

• Although some people think government should rigorous for criminals to reduce crime, another people believe there are many suitable ways to reduce crime.

• On the one hand, some argue believe longer prison sentences an impact on the reduce crime rate so government should justice enforce because of that criminals are dangerous people so who must be isolation of community.

• Firstly, if criminals stay for a long time in the person, they will be have plenty time to think about their mistakes.

• For instant: some criminals have longer prison sentences changing behavior after freedom and they became different persons and start new life.

• Secondly, this group think if somebody away from the community, crimes would be reduce in the society.

• On the other hand, other group believes a lot of countries have longer prison sentences but crime have increased entire the world.

• If prisoners training attention, they will improve prisoner's personality.

• For example: green space construction for vegetables planting and flowering can help their characters and also they are encouraging improve behavior and learning skills life.

• The reading can change prisoner's lives and raising awareness so some countries like Brazil, prisoners reading books to shorten their sentences therefore prisons should be places, prisoners can reborn after the freedom for beginning a new life.

• In my opinion, reduction of crime is the necessity for our world but we don’t ignore prisoner's feeling because sympathy can help prisoners to improve their conditions and we thing if they away from the community they would be recovery.