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Text from zulema20 - English

  • Living a week without a technological device

  • Have you ever wondered live in a small town without any kind of technological devices?
  • I am from of millennium, it means electronic tools, fast communication, internet and so on.
    • Well, I have decided to do this challenge because I want to show that there is a live behind our cellphone’s screen.
  • Seven days without it sounds crazy and scary but I am sure I can.
  • To achieve this challenge I traveled to a small town, its name is Illusion.
    • As its name says is an Illusion because everyone seems happy living their lives.
  • They are dedicated to their things, animals, children and home.
    • They do not have access to internet even to get there I walked one hour but I liked this nice place.
    • When I got there I stayed in the house of my mom’s friends, they receded me as a member of their family.
    • Well, the routine was the same as home with the difference that a rooster sings at 5 or 6 in the morning, I helped with breakfast then clean the house.
    • Almost at 9 or 10 we went to the garden to grow vegetables like lettuce and tomatoes and we cropped fruits, in this place the time runs so fast.
  • Inevitably, the days were going on and when it was Wednesday I needed my cellphone, computer, my favorite series, conversation with my friends.
    • This feel made me feel strange because I really needed check my Instagram and facebook account. So.
  • I pense in the people of this place, how they could live like that and feel that everything is ok.
    • I wanted to come back to my home but a little part of me wanted know the good side of live without technological devices.
    • I decided to occupy mi mind in other things maybe read a little bit but the only book that the family had was academic and the bible and of course I read it.
  • Others days we went to short walks, swim in the river, cook with wood and other thing that I have never imagined to do.
    • When it was the last day I feel so happy come back to my life and home but with a valuable experience because I understood that electronics devices that helped us a lot with information, communication and staff like that but if we analyze our lives, we can realize that we are empty inside because in social networks we just share the happiest moments but what about our feeling and emotions, we are losing face to face conversation, contact with people just because we pay much attention to our cellphones or new inventions even our happiness depend on what cellphone or smartphone or the up-to-date technology but those things really give us happiness.

PLEASE, HELP TO CORRECT EACH SENTENCE! - English

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    • Well, the routine was the same as home with the difference that a rooster sings at 5 or 6 in the morning, I helped with breakfast then clean the house.
      Voĉdoni nun!
    • Well, the routine was the same as home with the difference thatexception of a rooster scrowings at 5 or 6 in the morning,. I helped with breakfast thenand cleaning the house.
      Purple_sulfurPurple_sulfur profile picture Comments
      Voĉdoni nun!
    • ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 10ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 10
  • Frazo 11
    • Almost at 9 or 10 we went to the garden to grow vegetables like lettuce and tomatoes and we cropped fruits, in this place the time runs so fast.
      Voĉdoni nun!
    • Almost about 9 or 10 we went to the garden to growplant vegetables like lettuce and tomatoes and we croppplanted fruits, i. In this place the time runs so fast.
      Purple_sulfurPurple_sulfur profile picture Comments
      Voĉdoni nun!
    • ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 11ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 11
  • Frazo 12
    • Inevitably, the days were going on and when it was Wednesday I needed my cellphone, computer, my favorite series, conversation with my friends.
      Voĉdoni nun!
    • ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 12ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 12
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    • I decided to occupy mi mind in other things maybe read a little bit but the only book that the family had was academic and the bible and of course I read it.
      Voĉdoni nun!
    • I decided to occupy miy mind inwith other things, maybe read a little bit but the only book that the family had was an academic book and the bible and of course I read it.
      Purple_sulfurPurple_sulfur profile picture Comments
      Voĉdoni nun!
    • ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 16ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 16
  • Frazo 17
    • Others days we went to short walks, swim in the river, cook with wood and other thing that I have never imagined to do.
      Voĉdoni nun!
    • ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 17ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 17
  • Frazo 18
    • When it was the last day I feel so happy come back to my life and home but with a valuable experience because I understood that electronics devices that helped us a lot with information, communication and staff like that but if we analyze our lives, we can realize that we are empty inside because in social networks we just share the happiest moments but what about our feeling and emotions, we are losing face to face conversation, contact with people just because we pay much attention to our cellphones or new inventions even our happiness depend on what cellphone or smartphone or the up-to-date technology but those things really give us happiness.
      Voĉdoni nun!
    • When it was the last day I feelt so happy to come back to my life and home but with a valuable experience because I understood that electronics devices that helped us a lot with information, communication and stauff like that but if we analyze our lives, we can realize that we are empty inside because in social networks we just share the happiest moments but what about our feelings and emotions, we are losing face to face conversation, contact with people just because we pay too much attention to our cellphones orand new inventions even our happiness depends on whatthe cellphone or smartphone or the up-to-date technology but those things don't really give us happiness. ¶
      Purple_sulfurPurple_sulfur profile picture Comments
      Voĉdoni nun!
    • ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 18ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 18