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  • CHANGES IN CINEMA EXPERIENCES

    • I have read tow texts about how going to cinema has gone down in ages.
    • This are my opinions on the texts and the opinions of my own.
    • Going to the cinema is one of the most recognised social events.
    • Actually, even deciding what film you are going to watch has a social meaning and film industries are quite aware of how the cookie crumbles.
    • Thereby, the make use of films to engage with society, sometimes in an extraordinary way, although sometimes they just offer a poor-quality experience.
    • Both texts reflect on the social influence of cinema in audiences’ lives.
  • While the first text solely outlines the psychological influence of watching a movie at the cinema, the second texts gives an insight into how commercial movies have evolved.
  • The first text is a description of the wonders that we can expect when staring at the theatre screen, how you can get into a world in which you may be happier than in the real one; something that happens to plenty of us.
  • None of these experiences would be possible without the development of modern cinematographic technologies.
  • This being considered, it would be fair to claim that part of our hopes, beliefs and attitudes are based upon our experience sin the cinema rooms.
  • The second text, makes a good point in remind us that there is a tendency in movies being no longer what they were.
  • It is a clear criticism to big fil-making companies that aim to regard cinema tickets as pieces of paper with the words ‘benefits at viewers expenses’.
  • In conclusion, despite the positive outlook of spending an evening at the cinema, exposed in the first text, in lines of the second text we should be aware of the eye-opening reality of the rise of stupid comedies that only distract spectators, instead of giving them inspiration to carry on in life, as good moves are supposed to do.
  • This current situation should make film-viewers reclaim more high-quality experiences at the cinema to film-making industries that care about nothing but profit.

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    • Actually, even deciding what film you are going to watch has a social meaning and film industries are quite aware of how the cookie crumbles.
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    • Actually, even deciding what filmthe movies you are going to watch has a social meaning and filmmovie industries are quite aware of how the cookie crumbles.
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    • Thereby, the make use of films to engage with society, sometimes in an extraordinary way, although sometimes they just offer a poor-quality experience.
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    • Thereby, the makers use of films to engage with societymovies to attract social attention , sometimes int is an extraordinary way, although sometimes they just offer a poor-quality experience.
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    • Both texts reflect on the social influence of cinema in audiences’ lives.
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    • Both texts reflect on the social influence of cinema ining how effecting cinema and movies in the social and audiences’ lives.
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    • While the first text solely outlines the psychological influence of watching a movie at the cinema, the second texts gives an insight into how commercial movies have evolved.
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    • The first text is a description of the wonders that we can expect when staring at the theatre screen, how you can get into a world in which you may be happier than in the real one; something that happens to plenty of us.
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    • This being considered, it would be fair to claim that part of our hopes, beliefs and attitudes are based upon our experience sin the cinema rooms.
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    • It is a clear criticism to big fil-making companies that aim to regard cinema tickets as pieces of paper with the words ‘benefits at viewers expenses’.
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    • In conclusion, despite the positive outlook of spending an evening at the cinema, exposed in the first text, in lines of the second text we should be aware of the eye-opening reality of the rise of stupid comedies that only distract spectators, instead of giving them inspiration to carry on in life, as good moves are supposed to do.
      투표하세요!
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    • This current situation should make film-viewers reclaim more high-quality experiences at the cinema to film-making industries that care about nothing but profit.
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