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    • Soft drinks increases the risk of prostate cancer Drinking less than a can of soft drinks per day is enough to increase 40 percent risk of developing prostate cancer in men, a study lasting over 15 years has proven that.
  • The sugar in soft drinks is said to be the culprit activating and releasing hormone insulin, which nourishes tumors.
    • Many studies have found a link between soft drinks and impaired health status such as increasing heart disease and diabetes, gaining weight, etc. In the latest work, published in the American Journal of Clinical Nutrition, the authors from Sweden said that although more researches are needed to confirm the relationship between fresh water with prostate cancer, but it was enough reasons to cut down on the use of this product.
    • The team from the University of Lund monitors the health of more than 8,000 men with age from 45 to 73 lasting 15 years.
  • These people were in good health at the start of the study, and they were asked about food and drinking preferences.
    • At the end of the study, the experts have compared the eating habits of these people having prostate cancer with those who are still healthy; they found a clear link between soft drinks and this disease.
    • In the group with men who drank the most soft drinks, a prostate cancer up to 40% .
    • The researchers said that although genes play a major role in prostate cancer compared to many types of cancer, but diet also seems important.
  • However, some experts believe that more research is needed to confirm this association.

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