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  • Egypt

    • A few years ago, and to be precise, 7, I was fortunate to visit such a magnificent country as Egypt and, of course, enjoyed diving off the coast of the Red Sea, known to the whole world for marine life and fauna, analogues that exist only at the Great Barrier Reef in Australia and at the Caribbean islands.
    • The underwater world that I could see there, will forever be remembered for me by its magnificence, variety of species, colors and forms.
    • A lot of animals and plants, which I had previously seen only in photographs in magazines and on television, appeared before me in their natural habitat.
  • Among other things, I was fortunate enough to see moray eels, octopus, barracuda, dolphins and even a shark.
  • By the way, this shark was seen not only by me.
    • It looked exactly the same as in the horror film, the fin floated on the surface of the water and it floated a few dozen meters from the public beach.
    • The people who were resting there, in panic, rushed in different directions, as if they were afraid that the shark could get ashore.
    • At that moment I was in the water, but I gave in to panic, because I know that the shark’s behavior is similar to the behavior of dogs and if you would try to swim away from it as quickly as possible, it could attract her attention and increase the likelihood of her attack.
    • To my regret, at the moment this country is closed for visiting by citizens of Russia.
    • The blame for this is an act of terrorism that occurred 2 years ago.
    • In the sky over the Senay Peninsula, an explosive device detonated inside the plane flying to St.
    • Petersburg, which caused the aircraft to fall.

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    • A few years ago, and to be precise, 7, I was fortunate to visit such a magnificent country as Egypt and, of course, enjoyed diving off the coast of the Red Sea, known to the whole world for marine life and fauna, analogues that exist only at the Great Barrier Reef in Australia and at the Caribbean islands.
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    • A few years ago, and to be precise, 7 years ago, I was fortunate to visit such a magnificent country which was Egypt and, of course, enjoyed diving off the coast of the Red Sea, known to the whole world for marine life and fauna, analogues that exist only at the Great Barrier Reef in Australia and at the Caribbean islands.
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    • The underwater world that I could see there, will forever be remembered for me by its magnificence, variety of species, colors and forms.
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    • The underwater world that I could see there, will forever be remembered forby me byfor its magnificence, variety of species, colors and forms.
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    • A lot of animals and plants, which I had previously seen only in photographs in magazines and on television, appeared before me in their natural habitat.
      투표하세요!
    • A lot of animals and plants, which I had previously seen only in photographs, in magazines and on television, appeared before me in their natural habitat.
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    • It looked exactly the same as in the horror film, the fin floated on the surface of the water and it floated a few dozen meters from the public beach.
      투표하세요!
    • It looked exactly the same as in thea horror film, the fin floated on the surface of the water and it floatedswam a few dozen meters from the public beach.
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    • The people who were resting there, in panic, rushed in different directions, as if they were afraid that the shark could get ashore.
      투표하세요!
    • The people who were resting there, in panic, rushed into different directions, as if they were afraid that the shark could get ashore.
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    • At that moment I was in the water, but I gave in to panic, because I know that the shark’s behavior is similar to the behavior of dogs and if you would try to swim away from it as quickly as possible, it could attract her attention and increase the likelihood of her attack.
      투표하세요!
    • At that moment I was in the water, but I gave in to panic, because I knoew that the shark’s behavior is similar to the behavior of dogs and if you would try to swim away from it as quickly as possible, it could attract her attention and increase the likelihood of her attack.
      100% GOOD (2 votes)
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