添削

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    • Hope

    • Alan entered the room, the darkness was lurking but in the room, she can not enter, there is light and hope, all fear and despair are gone gone, It´s a moment of paz for him, he walked till the center, in that place there was a box a little strange, When Alan opened the box , felt something relief in his inside In the box there was a little toy was familiar for him,spent a time When he remember like his mom said that, When he was afraid the little toy was there for protec him and the dark no might do nothing against him , by end Alan could find the answer that needed.

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    • Hope
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    • Hope
      Alan entered the room. The darkness was lurking, but in the room, it can not enter. There is light and hope. All fear and despair are gone. Gone. It's a moment of spaz for him. He walked til the center. In that place, there was a box which was a little strange. When Alan opened the box, he felt something relieving in his inside. In the box, there was a little toy that was familiar to him. He spent some time; when he remembered that when he was afraid, his mom used to say that the little toy was there to protect him, and the dark may do nothing against him. By the end, Alan was able to find the answer that he needed.
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    • Alan entered the room, the darkness was lurking but in the room, she can not enter, there is light and hope, all fear and despair are gone gone, It´s a moment of paz for him, he walked till the center, in that place there was a box a little strange, When Alan opened the box , felt something relief in his inside In the box there was a little toy was familiar for him,spent a time When he remember like his mom said that, When he was afraid the little toy was there for protec him and the dark no might do nothing against him , by end Alan could find the answer that needed.
      投票しよう！
    • Alan entered the room, t. The darkness was lurking, but in the room, she can not enter, t. There is light and hope, a. All fear and despair are gone
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      G      one,. It´'s a moment of spaz for him, h. He walked untill the center, i. In that place there was a box which was a little strange,. When Alan opened the box , he felt something reliefving in his inside. In the box, there was a little toy that was familiar for him,to him. He spent a time. When he remember liked his mom said that, W when he was afraid, the little toy was there for protect him and the dark no might may do nothing against him , by. By the end , Alan could was able to find the answer that he needed.
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