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  • III.University (it's for an important oral exam)

    • (Hi everyone, please pay attention to this text, it's really important to me :) I'd like to thank you if you correct it.
    • It would be really nice of you, it's the third part of my oral .
    • Students may be required to repay their debts for several years because the cost is very high.
    • For exemple we've seen a video where Anabelle a former student presented her situation.
    • She graduated 2 yeas ago and she has got a huge debt of 000 and that could swell to $ 100000 if she continues to pay minimum monthly payments of nearly $ 900 per month.
    • On the same video we've seen the situation of a student of philosophy, he thinks that his debt will last 20 years.
    • Some students think that it's normal to pay that expensive for their studies and also to have debts in order to have a good job (even if they will have to repay their debts).
    • However, he said « If You want to do what you really want you have to pay ».
    • In spite of the very high cost of the studies, some means have been set up to help students.

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    • (Hi everyone, please pay attention to this text, it's really important to me :) I'd like to thank you if you correct it.
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    • (Hi everyone, please pay attention to this text, it's really important tofor me :) I'd like to thank you if you could able to correct it.
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    • She graduated 2 yeas ago and she has got a huge debt of 000 and that could swell to $ 100000 if she continues to pay minimum monthly payments of nearly $ 900 per month.
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    • She graduated 2 years ago and she has gothas incurred a huge debt of $1000 and that could swell towhich could potentially become $ 100000 even if she continues to pay minimum monthly payments of nearly $ 900 per month.
    • SWhen she graduated 2 years ago and , she has gotd a huge debt of 000 and that could swellwhich could increase to $ 100,000 even if she continues to pay minimum monthly payments of nearly $ 900 per month.
    • She graduated 2 yeas ago and she has got a huge debt of 000 and t. That could swell up to $ 100,000 if she continues to pay a minimum monthly payments of nearly $ 900 per month.
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    • On the same video we've seen the situation of a student of philosophy, he thinks that his debt will last 20 years.
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    • OIn the same video, we've seen the situation of a student of philosophy, he thinks that his debt philosophy student who believes that his period of repayment will last 20 years.
    • OIn the same video we've seen saw the situation of a student of philosophy, he thinkphilosophy student who estimates that his debt will lasttake 20 years to pay off.
    • On the same video, we've seen the situation of a student of philosophy,philosophy student wherein he thinks that his debt will lasttake up to 20 years.
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    • Some students think that it's normal to pay that expensive for their studies and also to have debts in order to have a good job (even if they will have to repay their debts).
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    • Some students think that it's normal both to pay that expensivekind of money for their studies and also to haveincur debts in order to have a good job (even if they will have to eventually repay theiris debts).
    • Some students think that it's normal to pay thate high expensive for their studies and also to have debts in order to have a good job (in the future even if they will have to repay their debts).
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