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    • The consequences of television's use

  • These days we live in a society where every kind of information is broadcasted through television or internet.
  • These new technologies have had so much influence on our life, that they have become necessary.
  • People are quite addicted to these applications.
    • Despite all expectations, the introduction of television has had both positive and negative effects.
    • A first positive consequence of television's introduction is the diffusion of news and informations in a faster way all over the country and the world.
    • For instance, when the terroristic attack to the twin towers happened, all families were sitting in front of television watching what was happening.
    • People felt as if they were there, actually they were in the opposite part of the world.
    • A second positive consequence of television's introduction is the possibility for everybody to discover new things and improve knowledges, thanks to some interesting TV programmes.
    • As a matter of fact, a recent survey on the BBC online showed that documentaries and science braodcasts were the most watched programmes during the last few years.
    • However, television has had negative effects on our daily life,too.
  • For instance, it has reduced the social relationships.
    • It is clear that now everyone spends most of his freetime watching every kind of TV programme, instead of knowing his heighbours or going out with friends.
    • Another negative consequence of television's introduction concerns children.
    • Inded, they have changed their daily routine, because they spend quite all the afternoon sitting in front of television and watching cartoons, while doing homeworks or playing with friends.
  • As a result, these days children have more social and health problems than in the past.
  • To conclude, television has made our life more interesting, but the way we live depends on the good use we make of it.

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    • A first positive consequence of television's introduction is the diffusion of news and informations in a faster way all over the country and the world.
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    • A first the positive consequence of television's introduction is the diffusion of news and informations in a faster way all over the country and the world.
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    • For instance, when the terroristic attack to the twin towers happened, all families were sitting in front of television watching what was happening.
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    • For instance, when the terroristic attack toed the twin towers happened, all families were sitting in front of television watching what was happening.
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    • A second positive consequence of television's introduction is the possibility for everybody to discover new things and improve knowledges, thanks to some interesting TV programmes.
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    • A second positive consequence of television's introduction is the possibility for everybody to discover new things and improve knowledges, thanks to some interesting TV programmes.
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    • As a matter of fact, a recent survey on the BBC online showed that documentaries and science braodcasts were the most watched programmes during the last few years.
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    • As a matter of fact, a recent survey on the BBC online showed that documentaries and science braoadcasts were the most watched programmes during the last few years.
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    • It is clear that now everyone spends most of his freetime watching every kind of TV programme, instead of knowing his heighbours or going out with friends.
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    • It is clear that now everyone spends most of his free-time watching every kind of TV programme, instead of knowing his hneighbours or going out with friends.
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    • Inded, they have changed their daily routine, because they spend quite all the afternoon sitting in front of television and watching cartoons, while doing homeworks or playing with friends.
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    • Indeed, they have changed their daily routine, because they spend quite all the afternoon sitting in front of television and watching cartoons, while doing homeworks or playing with friends.
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    • To conclude, television has made our life more interesting, but the way we live depends on the good use we make of it.
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