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  • Social Networks

  • What do you think about Social Networks?
  • Do you think they are useful? Why/ Why not?
  • Have you got a Facebook or Tuenti account? Why?/ Why not?
  • If yes, how often do you use it?
  • Do you think it can be dangerous to share some personal data on the internet?
    • Social networks have had an incredible increase of users in the last decade and also a hide evolution about what we refer to when we talk about social network.
  • Nowadays social networks also host blogs, wikis and chats, which have become in an increasingly important phenomenon.
  • From the view of the communication and information between the users, social networks have created new structures of messages that born in the same context: the Internet.
    • Moreover, this is taken with technology development, which stands out the utility of both tools.
    • It's absolutely true that new technologies and the Internet has create, above everything in the younger people, certain obsesion and addiction about Internet, which leads into the incapacity to control their use.
    • In the other hand, social networks has provided a lot of profits, that is, the use of the social networks changes the traditional vision of the capacity and professional development.
    • It has become a free time instrument, an educative tool and to the professional service, setting it out frome the cooperation and exchange of experiences and professional knowledge.
    • Personally I have a Facebook account because when I created it, it was a way to be in contact and to show things on Internet to make laugh.
  • Also we could comment jokes in the photos or even memes.
  • Nowadays I usually use my Facebook account three times per week more or less.
    • I think it's very dangerous share too much personal information on the net.
  • Nevertheless, today it bacame something indispensable show some details of your life, even if you're looking for a job.

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    • Social networks have had an incredible increase of users in the last decade and also a hide evolution about what we refer to when we talk about social network.
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    • Social networks have had an incredible increase in numbers of users in the last decade and also a hideden evolution aboutof what we refer to when we talk about social network.
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    • Nowadays social networks also host blogs, wikis and chats, which have become in an increasingly important phenomenon.
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    • From the view of the communication and information between the users, social networks have created new structures of messages that born in the same context: the Internet.
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    • It's absolutely true that new technologies and the Internet has create, above everything in the younger people, certain obsesion and addiction about Internet, which leads into the incapacity to control their use.
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    • It' is absolutely true that new technologies and the Internet hasve created, above everythingall in the younger people, a certain obsession with and addiction aboutto the Internet, which leads into thean incapacity to control their use.
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    • In the other hand, social networks has provided a lot of profits, that is, the use of the social networks changes the traditional vision of the capacity and professional development.
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    • IOn the other hand, social networks hasve provided a lot of profits, that isadvantages, for example, the use of the social networks changes the traditional vision of the capacity and professional development.
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    • It has become a free time instrument, an educative tool and to the professional service, setting it out frome the cooperation and exchange of experiences and professional knowledge.
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    • It has become a frespare time instrumenpersuit, an educative tool and tofor the professional service, setting it out frome the cooperation and exchange of experiences and professional knowledge.
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    • Personally I have a Facebook account because when I created it, it was a way to be in contact and to show things on Internet to make laugh.
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    • Personally, I have a Facebook account because when I created it, it was a way to be in contact with others and to show things on the Internet to make them laugh.
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    • Nevertheless, today it bacame something indispensable show some details of your life, even if you're looking for a job.
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