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  • II.University (it's for an important oral exam)

    • (Hi everyone, please pay attention to this text, it's really important for me :) I'd like to thank you if you correct it.
    • It would be really nice of you, it's the second part of my oral, the debate of the day will be in the entrance to American universities.) (...) The university returns very expensive to the students, they are forced to borrow , to ask for help to their families or obliged to take a job parallely to their studies to be able to pay it .
    • We studied a text where we've found the chronologic description of the different jobs of Crystal a student who work hard to be able to study at university .
    • We remarked that at the end of her fourth year of university she worked 60 hours per week among which the 12 hours of classes.
    • In despite of the small jobs apart from university, the students cannot always pay it,here intervenes a medley of help from their entourage,a work from their job and some luck .
    • For it they thus have to be very motivated , perseverant and they must have a good sense of autonomy.
    • For example Crystal was intended to have several jobs because she didn't want to ask a lot of help to her parents .
    • She had a financial help from her family (grants) .
    • They also offered her the money from their loans, a graduation present.

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    • It would be really nice of you, it's the second part of my oral, the debate of the day will be in the entrance to American universities.) (...) The university returns very expensive to the students, they are forced to borrow , to ask for help to their families or obliged to take a job parallely to their studies to be able to pay it .
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    • It would be really nice of you, it's for the second part of my oral, the debate of the day will be in thehich is an entrance exam to American universities.)¶¶(...)¶The university returnis very expensive tofor the students, so they are forced to borrow money, to ask for help to their families for help, or are obliged to take a job parallelyin addition to their studies to be able to pay for it .
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    • We studied a text where we've found the chronologic description of the different jobs of Crystal a student who work hard to be able to study at university .
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    • WeIn class we recently studied a text where we've found the chronologic descriptions of the different jobs of Crystalthat a student who had to work hard to be able to study at university .
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    • We remarked that at the end of her fourth year of university she worked 60 hours per week among which the 12 hours of classes.
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    • We remarknoted that at the end of her fourth year of university she worked 60 hours per week amoduring which tshe also took 12 hours of classes.
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    • We remarknoted that at the end of her fourth year of university she worked 60 hours per week amlong which ithe 12 hours of classes.
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    • In despite of the small jobs apart from university, the students cannot always pay it,here intervenes a medley of help from their entourage,a work from their job and some luck .
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    • In dDespite of the small jobs apart from university, the students canould not always pay it,here intervenes. This is where having a medley of help from theiran entourage, a work from their job and some luck intervened.
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