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  • IS SALARY THE MOST IMPORTANT FACTOR?

    • To start with this subject, I would like to say that money is pretty important nowadays, of course.
  • But it is not the only one.
    • It is well-known that wealthy people have problem as well, and many of them are unhappy.
  • In some occasions the richer they are, the lonelier they feel.
    • Anyway, let is face it; there are certainly some advantages of being rich.
  • Nevertheless, in this day and age, we are in a society which changes daily.
    • Nobody knows what career will be successful in the future.
    • Sometimes, you choose a successful profession and when you finish, 5 years later, there are a lot of unemployed.
    • Furthermore, you have to devote lot of time in your job every day, that is why it is important you love it.
    • If you like your job, you will promote, you will find opportunities; and consequently, you will get a good wage and it will increase most probably.
    • If you love your job, you will find the path in order to earn money, and you will have work satisfaction.
    • All things considered, I firmly believe that the most important factor when you choose a career is that you feel personal satisfaction.

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