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  • The new British dream represents the possibility to succeed in Britain even if you are an immigrant or if you have some origins which won’t be an obstacle for their careers.
  • This text doesn’t content with describing the British dream it highlight the empirical reality of this dream by showing some examples of immigrants’ successful, either at school, at university, or in workplace.
  • The British people hire the immigrants because according to them they did the travel until Britain because they are more motivated than anyone else.
  • The British dream which is especially suitable for immigrants show a kind of positive action as in United States, for the Asians and the Blacks, they try to give some role models for the disadvantaged young people.
  • It’s an important challenge for the States of Britain.
  • But it’s a success because more young Chinese or young Indian have more success to the exams than white people.
  • But the author centers the new British dreams on the success at school or in the work, but never on some values specific of Britain, according to him the only things which is important is the business world.
  • So according to the author the British Dream no has particular values except the social successful.
  • However even it’s in this text the success is an essential element for the new British Dream, there is no need to show that we made a success, people doesn’t care in a friendly relation or just for a knowledge.

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    • The new British dream represents the possibility to succeed in Britain even if you are an immigrant or if you have some origins which won’t be an obstacle for their careers.
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    • This text doesn’t content with describing the British dream it highlight the empirical reality of this dream by showing some examples of immigrants’ successful, either at school, at university, or in workplace.
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    • The British people hire the immigrants because according to them they did the travel until Britain because they are more motivated than anyone else.
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    • The British dream which is especially suitable for immigrants show a kind of positive action as in United States, for the Asians and the Blacks, they try to give some role models for the disadvantaged young people.
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    • But the author centers the new British dreams on the success at school or in the work, but never on some values specific of Britain, according to him the only things which is important is the business world.
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    • However even it’s in this text the success is an essential element for the new British Dream, there is no need to show that we made a success, people doesn’t care in a friendly relation or just for a knowledge.
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