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  • School children are becoming far too dependent on computers.

    • Nowadays computers become part of our life.
    • We spend a lot of time in front of them maybe too much.But not only adults but also younger generation start to use compyuter from very young age.It becomes their life style.Some says that these is alarming fact ,becouse as a result children from young age stop to develop themselves.
    • In case of reading,children now use compyuters instead of books.It is undeniable fact that through internet ,nowadays people can get much more information and spend less time than searching for a book.So we find advantages of compyuter and internet.Also it is time consuming to do something that you can do using compyuter rather than without it.Thats why modern life ,modern groth rates are so high than ten or twenty years ago.
    • But of course it has also negative side,like it is much more harmfull to eyes,from young age using compyuters becomes result of loosing ability of eyes to clear miror the objects.Also it makes children to prefer typing on the claviature than writing by hand.
    • All in all,in my opinion we should use compyuter and learning it from young age are the product and result of technological growth.Thats why I dissagree with this opinion.

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    • We spend a lot of time in front of them maybe too much.But not only adults but also younger generation start to use compyuter from very young age.It becomes their life style.Some says that these is alarming fact ,becouse as a result children from young age stop to develop themselves.
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    • We spend a lot of time in front of them; maybe too much.But not only adults but also younger generation also has started to use compyuter from a very young age.It has becomes their life style.Some says that these isis is an alarming fact ,becoause as a result children from a young age stop to develop themselves.
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    • In case of reading,children now use compyuters instead of books.It is undeniable fact that through internet ,nowadays people can get much more information and spend less time than searching for a book.So we find advantages of compyuter and internet.Also it is time consuming to do something that you can do using compyuter rather than without it.Thats why modern life ,modern groth rates are so high than ten or twenty years ago.
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    • In case of reading,children now use compyuters instead of books.It is an undeniable fact that through internet ,nowadays people can get much more information and spend less time than searching for a book.So we find advantages of compyuter and internet.Also it is time consuming to do something that you can do using compyuter rather than without it.That's why in modern life ,modern growth rates are so higher than say ten or twenty years ago.
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    • But of course it has also negative side,like it is much more harmfull to eyes,from young age using compyuters becomes result of loosing ability of eyes to clear miror the objects.Also it makes children to prefer typing on the claviature than writing by hand.
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    • But of course it also has also negative side,like it is much more harmfull to eyes,f.From a young age using compyuters becomes result ofs in loosing ability of our eyes to clear mirorly see the objects.Also it makes children to prefer typing on the claviaricature than writing by hand.
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