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    • it's for small kids (non-native speaker's, age 5) so it must be as easy as possible, apart from the narrator's phrases) Narrator: Once upon a time, there lived an old farmer (grandfather).He had a big farm and was growing up a lot of vegetables.
    • Everybody knew them because the Grandfather was the most famous farmer all over the region.
  • He grew the best vegetables in the village.
    • But one day he decided to growing turnips.
    • He goes to his farm and planted a turnip.
    • (After planting the turnip grandfather sleeps on his bed.
    • Then the giant turnip comes and all the vegetables ask for the Grandpa) Grandfather: Oh, what a big turnip we have in our farm.
  • I want to pull it out.
  • N.: Pulls the turnip.
  • Grandfather: One, two, three!
  • It is too big for me.
  • N.: Calls the Grandmother.
  • Grandfather: Granny, come here!
  • Help me, please!
    • N.: The Grandmother is very bright spark.
  • She likes to sing and dance.
  • She never looks sad.
  • Grandmother: What’s the matter?
  • Grandfather: Help me, please!
  • Grandmother: Ok, Grandpa.
    • N.: Grandmother by Grandfather, Grandfather by the turnip.Pull the turnip. Grf.
  • And Grm.: One, two, three!..
  • One, two, three! N.: No result. Grf.
  • Grm.: Oh, it’s too big for us!
  • N.: Grandmother calls the Granddaughter.
  • They have a Granddaughter,her name is Mary.
  • She is a very kind girl, she always helps her Grandparents.
    • Granddaughter: (with skipping-rope): I can count and you?
  • Let’s count and skip with me! I skip one.
  • (зрители считают вместе с ней).
  • I skip two…I skip three…I skip four…I skip five…I skip six…I skip seven…I skip eight…I skip nine…I skip ten. All right. Thank you.
    • Grandmother: Granddaughter,Granddaughter, come here, help us, please!
  • Granddaughter: All right, Granny. I’m coming.
    • N.: Granddaughter by Grandmother, Grandmother by Grandfather,Grandfather by the Turnip.
    • Pull the turnip. Grf. Grm.
  • Grd.: One, two, three!..
  • One, two, three! N.: No result. Grf. Grm.
  • Grd.: Oh, it’s too big for us!
  • N.: Granddaughter calls the dog.
  • Grd.: Dog, Dog, come here, help us, please!
  • N.: They also have a dog.
  • He is a very clever dog.
  • He guards the house and his master.
  • DOG: I am a dog, my name is Jack.
  • My nose is nice, my coat is black.
  • What’s the matter?
  • Granddaughter: Jack, Jack, help us, please!
  • Dog: All right, Granddaughter.
    • N.: Dog by Granddaughter, Granddaughter by Grandmother, Grandmother by Grandfather, Grandfather by the Turnip.Pull the turnip.
  • Together: One, two, three!...
  • One, two, three! N.: No result.
  • Together: Oh, it’s too big for us!
  • N.: And they have a cat, Ginger (Fluffy) by name.
    • She is a very good mother for her kittens.
  • She takes care of them and plays with them.
  • Cat: Kittens,come here!
  • (counts her kittens.One is missing.
  • Finally, the dog has found him.
  • Ginger plays with her kittens.) Cat: Hands up, Hands down, Hands on your knees, Sit down.
  • (Kittens fall asleep) Oh,sleepy kittens, wake up Now, please, stand up!
  • Ok, you may run around! ………………..
  • Dog: Cat, Cat, help us, please!
  • Cat: Bye bye,kittens All right, Dog. I’m coming.
    • N.: The cat by the dog, the dog by the granddaughter, the granddaughter by the grandmother, the grandmother by the grandfather, the grandfather by the turnip.
    • Pull the turnip.
  • Together: One, two, three!..
  • One, two, three! N: No result.
  • Together: Oh, it’s too big for us!
  • Cat: Mouse, Mouse, come here!
  • Help us, please!
  • Mouse: I am a mouse, You are a cat; One, two, three, You catch me!
  • Cat: No, I don’t.
  • Help us, please!
  • Mouse: What’s the matter?
  • Cat: This turnip is very big for us, we can’t pull it out! Mouse: OK.
  • Together: One, two, three!..
  • One, two, three!
  • Turnip: Here I am!
  • All together: Oh!
  • What a big turnip we have!

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