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  • Money is one of the greatest exchanging resources and item of measurement wherever been invented passing by historical process.
  • And relatively to me as a representator of one among millions humankind who is dealing operation with money.
  • Generally, the route of circulating money in system contents of two basic actions - implement resources into action or extract benefits from here.
  • As a participant of cash cycling industry daily I spend money acquiring profits, either save money and in my view that both procedures cannot be divided into parts, because that are unassembled process.
  • Simultaneously with action of investing money for a beneficial project, subconsciously keeping idea of enhancing flourish and evading bankruptcy, then we prevent ourselves from squandering resources.
  • Hence the investment does not neglect the intension of saving money.
  • Discretely, process of investment resources consists of the saving money factor and coherences with it.
  • Decisively perform and reveal the point available through considering situation of a new car purchasing.
  • Intension to assume better condition, new engine, that does not need repair also let us forget about lot of expenses were linked with old one.
  • And elusive from wasting money evidently come along with that situation.
  • Secondly, in a view that each of attempt to reduce money outcome, save would be recognized as an situation of depositing cash into long-term deal or establishing safety for currency funds.
  • Before get under influence of short-term deal, which always request spending money immediately, for evading shortage we manage an estimation of product value, variety of applications thereby the process of holding actives starts take a place and often precedes a process of investing only for long-term projects, that more valuable and profitable.
  • By the way of conclusion, in the collaboration of cycling money process two processes inseparably are presented.
  • Depositing deals inherences from process of accumulating money and for me the conducting it is a first step before the investing will be started.
  • Therefore, spending some part of actives in the same time I save another part of my budget, which was formed as risk fund.

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    • Money is one of the greatest exchanging resources and item of measurement wherever been invented passing by historical process.
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    • Generally, the route of circulating money in system contents of two basic actions - implement resources into action or extract benefits from here.
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    • As a participant of cash cycling industry daily I spend money acquiring profits, either save money and in my view that both procedures cannot be divided into parts, because that are unassembled process.
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    • Simultaneously with action of investing money for a beneficial project, subconsciously keeping idea of enhancing flourish and evading bankruptcy, then we prevent ourselves from squandering resources.
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    • Intension to assume better condition, new engine, that does not need repair also let us forget about lot of expenses were linked with old one.
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    • Secondly, in a view that each of attempt to reduce money outcome, save would be recognized as an situation of depositing cash into long-term deal or establishing safety for currency funds.
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    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 11ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 11
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    • Before get under influence of short-term deal, which always request spending money immediately, for evading shortage we manage an estimation of product value, variety of applications thereby the process of holding actives starts take a place and often precedes a process of investing only for long-term projects, that more valuable and profitable.
      투표하세요!
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    • Depositing deals inherences from process of accumulating money and for me the conducting it is a first step before the investing will be started.
      투표하세요!
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    • Therefore, spending some part of actives in the same time I save another part of my budget, which was formed as risk fund.
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