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    • Covering letter

  • XXX means the name of the brand.
    • Thanks four your help Dear Sir or Madam, I have learned about your offer for a sales consultant intern who should have started since January 1st.
    • With this letter, I have the pleasure to offer you my application for this work placement from May 1st.
    • (as I have a work placement to do for school) Sophisticated and innovative at the same time, XXX is for me a brand which embody all the values of the french fashion industry and which better expresses what is luxe today : the inventiveness and the importance of the rigourness regarding innovation, the opulence, the sensitive and the unrivalled.
    • With a first experience in the ready-to-wear as saleswoman, in XXX, I would like to pursue next to you, in order to get prepared for a luxe career.
    • Furthermore, improving my english by working for a shop that I love, will certainly be the best experience ever.
    • Attached to the elegance, the politeness, the discretion and the good work, I would like to place all my energy at the disposal of your customer base.
    • Other qualities like the punctuality, the serious and the integrity will be profitable to me doing this job.
    • I hope to have soon the chance to show you in person, my motivations during an interview.
  • Thank you, in advance, for your consideration.
  • Yours faithfully,

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    • Thanks four your help Dear Sir or Madam, I have learned about your offer for a sales consultant intern who should have started since January 1st.
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    • Thanks four your help ¶¶Dear Sir or Madam,¶¶I have learned about your offerthe position for a sales consultant intern who should have started sinceopening January 1st.
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    • Thanks four your help ¶¶Dear Sir or Madam,¶¶I have learnedt about your offer for a sales consultant intern who should have started since January 1st.
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    • (as I have a work placement to do for school) Sophisticated and innovative at the same time, XXX is for me a brand which embody all the values of the french fashion industry and which better expresses what is luxe today : the inventiveness and the importance of the rigourness regarding innovation, the opulence, the sensitive and the unrivalled.
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    • (as I have a work placement to do for school)¶¶Sophisticated and innovative at the same time, XXX is for me a brand which embodyies all the values of the french fashion industry and which better expresses what is luxe today : the inventiveness and the importance of the rigourness regardingrous innovation, the opulence, the sensitive and the unrivalled.
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    • (as I have a work placement to do for school)¶¶Sophisticated and innovative at the same time, XXX is for me is a brand which embodyies all the values of the fFrench fashion industry and which better expresses what is luxeury today : the inventiveness and the importance of the rigourness regarding innovation, the opulence, the sensitiveity and the unrivalled.
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    • With a first experience in the ready-to-wear as saleswoman, in XXX, I would like to pursue next to you, in order to get prepared for a luxe career.
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    • With a first experience in the ready-to-wear as a saleswoman, in XXX, I would like to pursue next to you, in order to get prepared for a luxeurious career.
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    • Attached to the elegance, the politeness, the discretion and the good work, I would like to place all my energy at the disposal of your customer base.
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    • Attached to long withe elegance, the politeness, the discretion and the good work, I would like to place all my energy at the disposal of your customer base.
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    • Other qualities like the punctuality, the serious and the integrity will be profitable to me doing this job.
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    • Other qualities like the pPunctuality, the seriousness and the integrity will be profitable to me doingare qualities I bring to this job.
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    • Other qualities like the punctuality, the seriousness and the integrity will be profitable to me while doing this job.
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