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  • Hello would you correct me please :))

  • Synthesis Social Networks.
    • During all this year we have been studying the notion of progress.
    • I’d like to state a definition of progress.
    • Progress is the idea that the world and the society can evolve in therms of sciences, technology, modernization, living condition, etc. But today we get interested on technological progress ; more precisely by way of social networks.
    • However, SoNet site are still debate between those who consider that it’s beneficial and those for whom it’s harmful.
    • In this way I propose we loot at a question ; « Is the notion of progress necessarly synonymous with improvment ?
    • So in the first place we get itterested on the description of Social Networks then we see pors and cons about it and finally what are the solucion of cons.
  • 1 Description Social network.
    • -SN are becoming more and more popular in daily life.
    • -They appeare in 1990.
  • -Boom in 2004 with facebook.
  • → the most important.
    • It make evolve our society.
  • There are 1,55 billion of inscriptions.
  • 2 Pros and cons.
    • A) Adventages (T1).
    • -Comunication on line / in live freely quickly.
    • - Make metting : new friends / find long-lost friend.
    • - Access to the whole world : news / meet virtually a new culture … - « New country » → mean to flee that is less than perfect in real life.
  • But couldn't this loop-hole lead to an imprisonment in a virtual life ? B) Cons.
  • -Real life not to be confused with virtual life.
    • -Keep control and not begin addict.
  • - Private life : you can't delete something.
    • → personal information can be used against you and lead to cyberbulling.
    • -Cyberbulling is a drama problem of SN.
    • → topical issue which affect predominantly teenager. → testimony. 3 Solution.
    • A) Solution on cyberbulling : - there is a key role of the entourage.
    • If someone are victim of cyberbullying he have to speak about it.
  • -There are a lot of assiciative site which propose some help to victims « beatbullying.org » .
    • B)Shouldn't be addict.
    • -Raise awarness among users that it isn't the real life.
    • → (T1) « not to be taken as an alternative to life - iperfections, disappointments, ugliness, and all » the journalist.
    • To conclude we can say that social networking site have progressed but I think they have to improve about security.
    • In fact they are a fabulous tool but it may be dangerous on influenced people.

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