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  • In many developing countries

    • In many developing countries, there is a problem with declining quality of air and water from both industry and construction.
  • What measures could be taken to prevent this?
    • Some developing countries are dealing a big issue, which is the air quality and the increased pollution.
    • I think that it is a part of the progress and before or later every country has to tackle it.
    • It is almost a global warning and not just these countries are in dangerous.
    • We all have to be careful and try to be more conscious about this deal.
    • Anyway, to prevent this kind of problem, countries less developed have to follow what countries more developed have done during these last years.
    • For instance, for preventing air quality in the biggest cities oldest vehicles can not be ridden during few days of the week.
    • This is just one of the measures which could be taken by a country.
    • Furthermore, i would focus my forces on changing people mind.
    • Because i think that state and policy can prevent the country air quality by banning some bad behaviors against the environment, but to make the real difference, first of all, needs to make a change increasing the awareness about this essential issue.
    • Instead, a lot of no-profit organizations, helped by the state, are encouraging people with good nature events in which they try to explain how much critical is the environmental issue.
    • Another measure, used in all cities, is promoting recycle and checking the garbage if someone makes a some kind of mistake.
    • Furthermore, in few cities garbaged are inspected and if there are wastes in the wrong container people get fined.
    • In conclusion, we are all connected by a biggest cause, which is the improvement of our life and the prevention of our world.
    • All of us have to try to behave just a little bit better even if we are in a developed country or in a developing region.
    • Of course developing countries are now dealing this problem more than ever, but this is not just a concentrate problem.

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    • In many developing countries, there is a problem with declining quality of air and water from both industry and construction.
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    • In many developing countries, there is a problem withof declining quality of air and water from both industry and construction.
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    • Some developing countries are dealing a big issue, which is the air quality and the increased pollution.
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    • Some developing countries are dealing with a big issue, which is the air quality and the increased pollution.
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    • Anyway, to prevent this kind of problem, countries less developed have to follow what countries more developed have done during these last years.
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    • Anyways, to prevent this kind of problem, countries less developed countries have to follow what countries more developed countries have done during these last years.
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    • For instance, for preventing air quality in the biggest cities oldest vehicles can not be ridden during few days of the week.
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    • For instance, for preventing air quality in the biggestbig cities oldestr vehicles can not be riddenshouldn't be allowed to ply during few days of the week.
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    • Because i think that state and policy can prevent the country air quality by banning some bad behaviors against the environment, but to make the real difference, first of all, needs to make a change increasing the awareness about this essential issue.
      투표하세요!
    • Because iI think that state and policy can prevent the deterioration of country air quality by banning some bad behaviours against the environment, b. But to make the real difference, first of all, all needs to make a change about increasing the awareness about this essential issue.
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    • Instead, a lot of no-profit organizations, helped by the state, are encouraging people with good nature events in which they try to explain how much critical is the environmental issue.
      투표하세요!
    • Instead, a lot of non-profit organizations, helped by the state, are encouraging people with good natureal events in which they try to explain how much critical is the environmental issue is.
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    • Another measure, used in all cities, is promoting recycle and checking the garbage if someone makes a some kind of mistake.
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    • Another measure, used in all cities, is promotingon of recycleing and checking the garbage if someone makes a some kind of a mistake.
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    • Furthermore, in few cities garbaged are inspected and if there are wastes in the wrong container people get fined.
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    • Furthermore, in few cities garbaged are is inspected and if there areis wastes in the wrong container people getare fined.
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    • In conclusion, we are all connected by a biggest cause, which is the improvement of our life and the prevention of our world.
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    • In conclusion, we are all connected by a biggestsingle cause, which is the improvement of our life and the prevention of our worldpollution.
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    • All of us have to try to behave just a little bit better even if we are in a developed country or in a developing region.
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    • All of us haves to try to behave just a little bit better even if we are in a developed country or in a developing regnation.
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    • Of course developing countries are now dealing this problem more than ever, but this is not just a concentrate problem.
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    • Of course developing countries are now dealing with this problem more than ever, but this is not just a concentrate problem. problem which is just the only one.
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