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    • After school I went to university at the Faculty of Architecture of Design and studied only the first course. then I went to another country to work due to lack of money and to help my family. then I dropped out of university, but I was abroad working as a bartender at the restaurant. but one day I realized that education is necessary to get to realize my dream, the dream of childhood to become an desighner or a travel agent.
    • I can draw and to invent different designs, patterns, I think I have a talent because I drew everything that I saw when I was little, and even made my own personal logo).
    • I chose your university to carry out my dream and do not lose my talent).
    • Why I decided to study in your university?
    • Because your university is one of the goodest university in the world, because Korea is one of world's developing countries.
    • By the way I have learning Korean for one month and I think Korean is easy to learn, I like it.)

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    • After school I went to university at the Faculty of Architecture of Design and studied only the first course. then I went to another country to work due to lack of money and to help my family. then I dropped out of university, but I was abroad working as a bartender at the restaurant. but one day I realized that education is necessary to get to realize my dream, the dream of childhood to become an desighner or a travel agent.
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    • After I finished school I went to the university at the Faculty of Architecture of Design and studied only the first course. tThen I went to another country to work due to lack of money and to help my family. thenAfter that I dropped out of the university, but. I was still abroad working as a bartender at thea restaurant. but one day I realized that education is necessary to getbe able to realize my dream, the dream of -- my childhood dream to become an desighner or a travel agent.
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    • After finishing school I went to uthe University at the Faculty of Architecture ofand Design and studied only the first course. tThen I went to another country to work due to lack of money and to help my family. tThen I dropped out of uUniversity, but I was still abroad, working as a bartender at thea restaurant. bBut one day I realized that education is necessary to get to realize myachieve my childhood dream,: the dream of childhood to become an desighner or a travel agent.
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    • I can draw and to invent different designs, patterns, I think I have a talent because I drew everything that I saw when I was little, and even made my own personal logo).
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    • I can draw and to invent different designs, and patterns,. I think I have a talent because I drew everything that I saw when I was little, and even made my own personal logo).
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    • I can draw and talso invent different designs, and patterns,. I think I have a talent because I drew almost everything that I saw when I was little, and even made my own personal logo).
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    • Because your university is one of the goodest university in the world, because Korea is one of world's developing countries.
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    • Because your university is one of the goodbest universityies in the world, and because Korea is one of world's developing countries.
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    • Because your uUniversity is one ofamong the goodbest uUniversityies in the world,. And also because Korea is one of the world's fastest developing countries.
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    • By the way I have learning Korean for one month and I think Korean is easy to learn, I like it.)
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    • By the way, I have learning Korean for one month and I think Korean is easy to learn,. I like it.)
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    • By the way I have been learning Korean for the last one month and I think Korean is easy to learn, I like it.)
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