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  • 1) This is the story of a joyful young French pensioner Billy who lives in a small house in the countryside.
  • 2) He leaves for his, old, narrow, wooden hut in the forest which he built when he was a child.
  • 3) He walks in the peaceful, shallow stream with a big smile.
  • 4) When he arrives, he decides to observe the moon with an ancient refracting telescope.
  • 5) But he makes a frightful discovery, the moon disappeared.
  • 6) He is very unhappy.
  • After some time, he finds a letter on the floor 7) It's a letter written by the moon, in which she writes she is sad because nobody is interested in it.
    • 8) Billy is very affect after he reads this letter and he decides to seek the moon.
    • 9) But in his letter, the moon to reappear decides to fulfill diverse mission to prove that Billy likes it.
    • 10) The first mission is make a bouquet of flowers but the moon is demanding and wants very special flowers which are obviously very rare.
  • 11)  Billy finishes this mission after many adventures .
    • 12) Indeed, he fell in the stinging nettle and he was pricked by a nest of wasp.
    • 13) Billy is very exhaust and he decides to put back for an another day the differentes mission.
    • 14) After the break, Billy to set off again adventure with the second mission.
    • 15) This mission is to draw in ink a portrait who his magnificent 16) But Billy don't have ink and he must to find it for finish this mission.
    • 17) Billy walk during some hours because he don't find supermarket who sell the ink.
    • 18) When he in a village, Billy is relieve.
    • He have find a ink and he draws the moon but he is sad because in the portrait he don't have a colors.
    • 19) When he finish this mission Billy decides to return in his wooden hut.
    • 20) He is happy, because when arrive the night, Billy look in a refracting telescope and he see a crescent moon.
    • 21) He think is a sign de la part the moon who show a little recognition of something effort supply by Billy.
    • 22) He remain last mission to reussit by Billy for the moon come back in the sky.
    • 23) The last mission is very difficult, indeed the moon to make a wish recover his beauty of youth.
    • 24) But this mission is complicated because the moon is in the sky and Billy on the world so Billy to look for a good idea for reply of this mission.

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    • After some time, he finds a letter on the floor 7) It's a letter written by the moon, in which she writes she is sad because nobody is interested in it.
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    • 9) But in his letter, the moon to reappear decides to fulfill diverse mission to prove that Billy likes it.
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    • 9) But in his letter, the moon decides to reappear deciin ordesr to fulfill diverse mission to provehelp prove to the moon that Billy likes it.
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    • 10) The first mission is make a bouquet of flowers but the moon is demanding and wants very special flowers which are obviously very rare.
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    • 10) The first mission is make a bouquet of flowers, but the moon is demanding and wants very special flowers, which are obviously very rare.
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    • 13) Billy is very exhaust and he decides to put back for an another day the differentes mission.
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    • 13) Billy is very exhausted and he decides to put backoff, for an another day, the differentesnext mission.
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    • 15) This mission is to draw in ink a portrait who his magnificent 16) But Billy don't have ink and he must to find it for finish this mission.
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    • 15) This mission is to draw, in ink, a portrait of someone who his magnificent.¶¶16) But Billy doesn't have ink, and he must to find it forto finish this mission.
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    • He have find a ink and he draws the moon but he is sad because in the portrait he don't have a colors.
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    • He have fis found a ink, and he draws the moon, but he is sad because in the portrait he doesn't have athe colors he needs.
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    • 20) He is happy, because when arrive the night, Billy look in a refracting telescope and he see a crescent moon.
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    • 20) HNow he is happy, because when arrived theat night, Billy looked in a refracting telescope and he seeaw a crescent moon.
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    • 21) He think is a sign de la part the moon who show a little recognition of something effort supply by Billy.
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    • 21) He thinks it is a sign de laof the part of the moon whothat shows a little recognition of something effort supply bythe effort that Billy gave.
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    • 23) The last mission is very difficult, indeed the moon to make a wish recover his beauty of youth.
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    • 23) The last mission is very difficult, indeed; the moon to make a wishwishes to recover histhe beauty of his youth.
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    • 24) But this mission is complicated because the moon is in the sky and Billy on the world so Billy to look for a good idea for reply of this mission.
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    • 24) But this mission is complicated, because the moon is in the sky, and Billy on the worldground, so Billy to looks for a good idea for reply ofway to handle this mission.
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