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  • Building a new shopping center

  • It has recently been announced that a large shopping center may be built in your neighborhood.
    • Do you support or oppose this plan? Why?
  • Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
  • With the increase of the population and their need to many necessary products in their life, building new facilities in the community is very demanding to fulfill their needs.
    • Building a large shopping center in my neighborhood would be absolutely a great idea to do so.
  • I believe this for two main reasons.
    • Firstly, by having a large shopping center in the community, it will save an ample time for many people who are struggling in buying foods from far distance malls from their local community.
    • As a matter of fact, it would also help saving money as well.
    • For example, before having malls in my community, we used to travel for the next city to buy some of the products that we don't have them in our community, like new phones with high technology, or chemical products that is used to protect the plants from harmful insects.
    • Morever, I wish it would was only about time.
    • Yet, it cost us more money comapring with other people who are living near to big malls.
    • Due, to the fact of travellng and spending a lot of money on transportation fees.
    • It cost us an arm and a leg for a period of one year.
    • As you can see, having a mall in my neighborhood would help us in saving our time so we could spend it with families and friends.
    • And also with saving money which we would use to cover other needs.
    • Secondly, it would provide a chance for people to be hired for new jobs that they will be announced, in order to keep the center shopping flourish.
    • Because, of the need of cleaning it, and protecting it at nights.
    • Beside the fact that they would need workers to sell their products, so it would be an ideal job especially for students who are looking for part time job to cover their spending bills.
    • For instance, when I was in university 3 years ago, I was in need to some money so I could pay the rent of my room.
    • And after searching for a while in the city that I used to study in, I found a part time job in a mall that is located behind my dormitory, which helped me paying the rents for my staying there.
    • As you can see, allowing a center shopping in my neighborhood to be build would help people to provide for their families as for the students to cover their needs as well.
    • To sum it up, Life has changed in the last decades, and the human needs is been increasing and consuming a verity of products.
    • Having a center shopping in one's nighborhood would be absolutely good opportunity for the people to save their money and time.
    • Similarly, helping people to work in it which would help them supporting their families to cover their needs.

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