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    • Should Young adults Be Independece From Their Parents Or Not?

    • Some people think that young adults should be living with their parents, and getting help and support for a long period of time.
    • However, in my view young adults is better for them to be independece from their parents and this is for two main reasons.
    • First, facing the real word, by confronting their real problems and trying to solve them on their own.
  • For example, when I used to be a kid, everything that I wanted I just asked my parents for, and they would provide it for me, without even thinking about it.
  • However, later when I grow up and start my new life of being away from them, I realized that life isn't that easy, and needs more courage and patience to handle it with its difficulties that may arise time to time.
    • And the best thing is that it would be great if a the young adults try to get their independence as soon as possible they could in order to experience the meaning of life and to learn how to stand on their feet from the early age.
    • So when they get adult they will be mature and responsible on their lives.
    • Second, being independence from the parents would give the young adult an advantage of building a bright future and great family.
    • For instance, back when I was at my young age, I started not getting help from anyone, and started working in a part time job to finance myself in order to succeed in my studies and my life, and at the end of my studies, I was able to easily get a job based on the experience that I gained from working in a different companies, and it helped me also to build a lovely family based on my experience in life.
  • And I taught my kids how to start getting independence from anyone, and getting responsibility to solve their own problems in order to be prepared for what's coming as challenges in their lives.
  • The total opposite of those who are not getting independence from their families, the majority of them are being loser in their lives, as they can't make a proper decision for themselves and waiting for others to decide for them.
  • To conclude, getting help from parents in an early age is essential in life.
  • However, seeking independence in a young adult age would be the perfect thing for them in order to be integrated in the society and stand on their feet to succeed in their lives.

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    • Some people think that young adults should be living with their parents, and getting help and support for a long period of time.
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    • Some people think that young adults should be livinglive with their parents, and getting helphelp them and support them for a long period of time.
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    • For example, when I used to be a kid, everything that I wanted I just asked my parents for, and they would provide it for me, without even thinking about it.
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  • Sentence 5
    • However, later when I grow up and start my new life of being away from them, I realized that life isn't that easy, and needs more courage and patience to handle it with its difficulties that may arise time to time.
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    • And the best thing is that it would be great if a the young adults try to get their independence as soon as possible they could in order to experience the meaning of life and to learn how to stand on their feet from the early age.
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    • And the best thing is that it would be great if a the young adults try to get their independence as soon as possible they could in order to experience the meaning of life and to learn how to stand on their feet from the early age.
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    • Second, being independence from the parents would give the young adult an advantage of building a bright future and great family.
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    • Second, being independencet from the parents would give the young adult an advantage of building a bright future and great family.
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  • Sentence 9
    • For instance, back when I was at my young age, I started not getting help from anyone, and started working in a part time job to finance myself in order to succeed in my studies and my life, and at the end of my studies, I was able to easily get a job based on the experience that I gained from working in a different companies, and it helped me also to build a lovely family based on my experience in life.
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    • For instance, back when I was at my young age, I started not getting help from anyone, and started working in a part time job to finance myself in order to succeed in my studies and my life, and at the end of my studies, I was able to easily get a job based on the experience that I gained from working in a different companies, and it helped me also to build a lovely family based on my experience in life.
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    • And I taught my kids how to start getting independence from anyone, and getting responsibility to solve their own problems in order to be prepared for what's coming as challenges in their lives.
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  • Sentence 11
    • The total opposite of those who are not getting independence from their families, the majority of them are being loser in their lives, as they can't make a proper decision for themselves and waiting for others to decide for them.
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    • However, seeking independence in a young adult age would be the perfect thing for them in order to be integrated in the society and stand on their feet to succeed in their lives.
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