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  • Pouvez vous m'aidez à corriger cet entretien en anglais ?

    • Well, I hope not to late for this interview especially as I dream of being chosen this position.
    • Well calm down us it should be me It's 10am, I'll see if Miss Jones arrived Hello Miss Jones?
    • I am Miss Smith and I am your interwiever Well, follow me I'm glad you're on time, I like punctuality. Sit well ...
    • I have received your application, which seduced me instead I have to say and then go ahead, tell me about you.
    • Well, I am a young graduate of the Faculty of Finance and Banking.
    • I've done my entire career at the university in which I could specialize in Wealth Management.
    • I also had the chance to have a sandwich with the network BNP Paribas which allowed me to have a hands-on experience very interesting.
  • It is true that the sandwich course is a good alternative to combine both the theoretical and the practical.
    • And you worked on a specific project?
    • Yes, I initially became aware of this market and especially I had to learn to gain the confidence of customers who tend to be wary of young and then I directed my activity on which the tax exemption is a sector full change with the current government. All right.
    • It is true that taxation is a strong point of our business but there is also a significant legal side and I see that you study the law of property.
    • You can tell me more?
  • Quite the right heritage highlights matrimonial regimes, the liquidation of the community in the event of divorce but also the succession.
    • It is important to understand and properly orient themselves in these areas do not feel harm at any time.
    • That is true what you say.
    • And given your background you can imagine that a banker is also a business line.
    • Have you commercial mind?
    • Oh I think I have gained and tamed through two years and some months I have spent in the field.
    • Well see it ...
  • And if I asked you ... * ...
    • * tries to sell me this rubber.
    • Go ahead, show me the richness of your commercial skill. Uh ... Okay ...
    • This gum, in his classic look hides immense qualities and innovations.
    • Firstly its size, it is both discreet not to interfere in the kit while large enough not to get found.
    • Its packaging more colorful and gives it a tangy happy while providing comfort to the user ... And ... And ... uh ...
  • It was a good start but there are things in there again.
  • Firstly, the language used should be simple.
    • What you say should be directly grasped and understood by your partner.
    • Talk about concrete things like a scenario or plan the customer in a situation where he might need.
    • Well, now can you tell me what were the highlights of your training, those who have the most deceived.
    • Oh, I think the business negotiation course were my favorite class without a doubt.
    • And I also enjoyed the taxation course because I find them very practiced.
  • Thank you for your help !

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    • Well, I hope not to late for this interview especially as I dream of being chosen this position.
      투표하세요!
    • Well, I hope I'M not toO late for this interview especially as I dream of being chosenas I am very motivated for this position.
    • Well, I hope I am not too late for this interview, especially as I dream of being chosenwould love to get this position.
      투표하세요!
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    • Well calm down us it should be me It's 10am, I'll see if Miss Jones arrived Hello Miss Jones?
      투표하세요!
    • Well calm down us it should be me¶relax¶It's 10am, I'll see if Miss Jones has arrived¶Hello Miss Jones?
    • Well calm down us it should be me, relax.¶¶It's 10am, I'll see if Miss Jones has arrived¶Hello ,Miss Jones?
      투표하세요!
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    • I am Miss Smith and I am your interwiever Well, follow me I'm glad you're on time, I like punctuality. Sit well ...
      투표하세요!
    • I am Miss Smith and I am your interwiever¶Well, follow me¶I'm glad you're on time, I like punctuality. Sit well ...Please make yourself comfortable
    • I am Miss Smith and I am your interwvievwer¶Well, follow me¶I'm glad you're on time, I like punctuality. Sit well please sit down....
      투표하세요!
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    • I have received your application, which seduced me instead I have to say and then go ahead, tell me about you.
      투표하세요!
    • I have received your application, which seduced meI found instead I have to say and then go ahead,resting.¶Please tell me about you.rself
      투표하세요!
    • I have received your application, which seduced me instead I have to say and then. i have to say that I found it interesting. Please go ahead, and tell me about yourself..
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    • I've done my entire career at the university in which I could specialize in Wealth Management.
      투표하세요!
    • I've done my entire careerstudies at the university in which I could specialize in Wealth Management.
    • I've done my entire careercompleted my studies at the university in whichwhere I could specialize in Wealth Management.
      투표하세요!
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    • I also had the chance to have a sandwich with the network BNP Paribas which allowed me to have a hands-on experience very interesting.
      투표하세요!
    • I also had the chance to have a sandwich with the network BNP Paribas which allowed me to have a hands-on experience that I found very interesting.
    • I was also had the chancelucky enough to have a sandwich with the networksomeone from the BNP Paribas network which allowed me to have a hands-on experience which was very interesting.
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    • Yes, I initially became aware of this market and especially I had to learn to gain the confidence of customers who tend to be wary of young and then I directed my activity on which the tax exemption is a sector full change with the current government. All right.
      투표하세요!
    • Yes, I initially became aware of this market and especially I had to learn to gain the confidence of customers who tend to be wary of young and tpeople. Then I directed my activity on which the tax exemption which is a sector fullundergoing complete changes with the current government. All right.
      투표하세요!
    • Yes, I initially became aware of, I got to know this market and especially I had to learn how to gain the confidence of customers who tend to be wary of the young and then I directed my activity on which theconcentrated on tax exemption which is a sector fullundergoing change with the current government. All right.
      투표하세요!
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    • It is true that taxation is a strong point of our business but there is also a significant legal side and I see that you study the law of property.
      투표하세요!
    • It is true that taxation is a strong point of our business but there is also a significant legal side and I see that you study the law ofied property law.
      투표하세요!
    • It is true that taxation is a strong point ofimportant in our business but ther legal side is also a significant legal side and I see that you study the law of property law.
      투표하세요!
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    • Quite the right heritage highlights matrimonial regimes, the liquidation of the community in the event of divorce but also the succession.
      투표하세요!
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    • It is important to understand and properly orient themselves in these areas do not feel harm at any time.
      투표하세요!
    • It is important to understand and properly orient themselves in these areas do notoneself in these feiel harm at any time.ds
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 14ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 14
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    • Firstly its size, it is both discreet not to interfere in the kit while large enough not to get found.
      투표하세요!
    • Firstly its size, it is both discreet so as not to interferestick out in the kit while large enough not to get founbe overlooked.
      투표하세요!
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    • Its packaging more colorful and gives it a tangy happy while providing comfort to the user ... And ... And ... uh ...
      투표하세요!
    • Its packaginglook is more colorful and gives it a (tangy happy) ??? while providing comfort to the user ... And ... And ... uh ...
      투표하세요!
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    • Talk about concrete things like a scenario or plan the customer in a situation where he might need.
      투표하세요!
    • Talk about concrete things like a scenario or plan for the customer in a situation where he might need help.
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    • Talk about concrete things like a scenario or planrepare the customer in fora situation whereich he might need.
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    • Well, now can you tell me what were the highlights of your training, those who have the most deceived.
      투표하세요!
    • Well, now can you tell me what were the highlights of your training, and those who have the most deceived.disappointed you the most
      투표하세요!
    • Well, now can you tell me now what were the highlights of your training, those were and who have the most deceived.disappointed you most¶
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