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  • My Motivation Letter for Aisling Project

    • Working with children requires a special approach, because children are moody, stubborn, they need to explain everything in detail and interest them.
    • After spending a lot of time in the sport, I still play and talk with children every day.
    • Sometimes I, as a trainer, look after the children, because sport in some moments can be very dangerous and it is important to understand that, but sport gives a lot of good skills, agility, strength, reaction, they can save lives in emergency situations, I had this a situation in my life, and I am very glad that I trained.
    • I participated in the sport camp where we trained a couple of weeks, and were sporting events.
    • Now I'm one of the older athletes with experience in 17 years, having prizes for running, swimming, conoeing and rowing.
    • Watching a child, I can tell him what qualities it is better to develop.
    • I can teach a child to play in the team, even without the use of words, knowing only the movement of players, this skill is very useful.
    • For example one man comes to us play basketball, he speaks English badly, he is volunteer from Spain, but we understand each other with gestures very good.
    • I have experience of sporting events and their organizations, know how to make them interesting and safe.
    • As a volunteer, I would like to meet new people and make new friends, improve spoken skill and get life experience.
    • I don't have bad habits.
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    • Working with children requires a special approach, because children are moody, stubborn, they need to explain everything in detail and interest them.
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    • Working with children requires a special approach, because children are moody, stubborn, and they¶need to explain everything in detail andbout what interests them.
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    • After spending a lot of time in the sport, I still play and talk with children every day.
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    • After spendingSince I spend quite a lobit of time in the sports, I¶still play and talk with children every day.
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  • 문장 3
    • Sometimes I, as a trainer, look after the children, because sport in some moments can be very dangerous and it is important to understand that, but sport gives a lot of good skills, agility, strength, reaction, they can save lives in emergency situations, I had this a situation in my life, and I am very glad that I trained.
      투표하세요!
    • Sometimes I, aAs a trainer, I sometimes look after the children,¶because sport in some moments can be very dangerous being that sports are sometimes dangerous. On the other hand it is important to understand that, but¶ sports gives a lot of good create diverse physical skills, agility, strength, and best of all reaction,s they canat could possibly save lives in an emergency situations,. I had this ave experienced emergency situation is on my life, and I am very glad that I that may not have turned out well had I not been trained.
      투표하세요!
    • Sometimes I, as a trainer, look after the children,¶bBecause sport is can some moments cantimes be very dangerous and it is important to understand that, but¶sport gives a lot of good skills,I, as a trainer, have chaperoned the children. It is important to understand the risks involved in athleticism. However, sports also improve agility, strength, and reaction time. Because of this, they can save lives in an emergency¶situations, I had this a situation in my life, and I am very glad that I. Having experienced an emergency situation, I am glad that I had athletic traineding.
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    • I participated in the sport camp where we trained a couple of weeks, and were sporting events.
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    • I have participated in the sports camp and sporting events where we trained for a couple of weeks, and were sporting events.
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    • Now I'm one of the older athletes with experience in 17 years, having prizes for running, swimming, conoeing and rowing.
      투표하세요!
    • Now I'm one of the older athletes with experience inof 17 years, having. During those years I earned prizes for running,¶swimming, conoeing and rowing.
      투표하세요!
    • Now I'm one of the older athletes with experience in 17 years, having17 years of experience. During those years I earned prizes for running, swimming, coanoeing and rowing.
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    • Watching a child, I can tell him what qualities it is better to develop.
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    • Watching a child, I can tellSince I have a lengthy experience in a number of physical activities it is easier for me to watch a child, and educate him on what qualities it is betterhe or she has and what they may need to develop.
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    • Watching a child, I can tell him what qualities it is betterSince I have a lengthy experience in a number of physical activities it is easier for me to watch a child, and educate him or her on what qualities he or she has and what they may need to develop.
      투표하세요!
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    • I can teach a child to play in the team, even without the use of words, knowing only the movement of players, this skill is very useful.
      투표하세요!
    • I can teach a childam also able to educate a student on how to play ion the team, even wi. Althoutgh they may not use of words, knowing only the movement of the players, this skill say a lot. Therefore being able to read a player is a very useful. skill.
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    • For example one man comes to us play basketball, he speaks English badly, he is volunteer from Spain, but we understand each other with gestures very good.
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    • For example one man comes to uthere is this man who sometimes plays basketball, he speaks¶English badly, he is volunteer from Spain, butwith us and his English is not that good since he is from Spain. Nevertheless we understand each other wiell just by the gestures very good.that are used when playing basketball.¶
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    • I have experience of sporting events and their organizations, know how to make them interesting and safe.
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    • I have experienceam very qualified in the area of sporting events and their organizations, and I also know how to make them interesting¶and safe.
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    • As a volunteer, I would like to meet new people and make new friends, improve spoken skill and get life experience.
      투표하세요!
    • As a volunteer, I would like to meet new people and make new friends, improve spokemy communication skills and¶getain life experience.
      투표하세요!
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