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    • Dear Sir or Madam I am writing to you to express my interest in the position as a sales coordinator at your hotel, which I read at the local newspaper on 6th February.
    • My name is Silvia Winzap, I am 20 years old and work as a business woman in the local bank.
    • Before I have completed my commercial apprenticeship in an accounting office.
    • In my present job I can gain a lot of experience in the project management department.
    • My responsibilities include to make project reports for the whole bank.
    • In this activity, I have to deal with different people from different areas.
    • I also deepen my knowledge of Microsoft Products, when I prepare a various presentations.
    • Because of my interest in the hotel industry, I make further training in foreign languages, because they play an important role in this area.
    • I offer you an efficient, reliable and self-employed working method.
    • Furthermore, I own a strong team spirit.
    • I count my interest to organize things as my personal strengths.
    • Additionally, I am convinced that I find my way in the area of responsibility of a sales coordinator quickly and I look forward to further developing my skills at your hotel.
    • I am pleased tob e invited for an interview and I am looking forward to your positive feedback.
  • Yours faithfully

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    • Dear Sir or Madam I am writing to you to express my interest in the position as a sales coordinator at your hotel, which I read at the local newspaper on 6th February.
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    • Dear Sir or Madam,¶¶I am writing to you to express my interest in the position as a sSales cCoordinator position at your hotel, which I read at the local newspaper on 6th February.
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    • In this activity, I have to deal with different people from different areas.
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    • In this activity, I have to deal with different people from different areasDuring this process, I have to communicate and work with different people from different areas to gather information and conduct proper research for an accurate report.
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    • I also deepen my knowledge of Microsoft Products, when I prepare a various presentations.
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    • I also had the chance to deepen my knowledge of Microsoft Products, when IOffice, having to process paperwork and prepare a various presentations.
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    • Because of my interest in the hotel industry, I make further training in foreign languages, because they play an important role in this area.
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    • Because of my interest in the hotel industry, I make further training in foreign languages, becaus'm also trying to learn some foreign languages, like (input language here). For me theyis plays an important role in this areaour industry.
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    • Additionally, I am convinced that I find my way in the area of responsibility of a sales coordinator quickly and I look forward to further developing my skills at your hotel.
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    • Additionally, I am convinced that I find my way in the area of responsibility ofhave great assets to offer to the team, and I can flourish as a sSales cCoordinator quickly and I look forwardat your hotel. I would be honored to have the chance to further developing my skills at your hotelhere.
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    • I am pleased tob e invited for an interview and I am looking forward to your positive feedback.
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    • I am pleased tob e invited for an interview and I am looking forward to your positive feedbackreally hope to be able to have an interview with you, so we can discuss more about this great opportunity.
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