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Advantages of the Internet
There are many advantages of the internet.
The first advantage is that the internet helps people in education.
For example students use the internet to search for new information, so they can expand their knowledge.
The second advantage is people can use the internet to communicate with each other.
For instance, students who study abroad can interact with their families through a video chat.
Furthermore, the internet becomes very useful in business world.
Businessmen can transfer money through bank websites, which decreases the percent of crimes.
Finally, TV shows, news, and programs can be watched without the need of a television.
In conclusion, the internet is very useful in education, communication, and business.

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- There are many advantages of the internet.
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- The first advantage is that the internet helps people in education.
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- For example students use the internet to search for new information, so they can expand their knowledge.
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- The second advantage is people can use the internet to communicate with each other.
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- For instance, students who study abroad can interact with their families through a video chat.
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- Furthermore, the internet becomes very useful in business world.
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- Businessmen can transfer money through bank websites, which decreases the percent of crimes.
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- Finally, TV shows, news, and programs can be watched without the need of a television.
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- In conclusion, the internet is very useful in education, communication, and business.
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