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    • As Introduction I have to say that sometimes our Government try to protect us giving recomendations.
    • Nevertheless, everybody don´t agree with them.
    • One example could be the Health Service Deparment Suggestions.
    • Therefore I want to talk about vaccination, thaat I think is the most important preventive measure who affects every single person in our country, especially children and senior citizens.
    • From my point of view there are some vaccines that could be the best option for our health because its prevent high mortality rate illness.
    • Moreover , I think it´s an excessive measure to vaccinate the population for influenza every year.
    • It is for that reason that I think government should recommend but giving freedom to decide everyone the things that we think are better for us.

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    • As Introduction I have to say that sometimes our Government try to protect us giving recomendations.
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    • As Ian introduction, I have to say that, sometimes, our Ggovernment tryies to protect us by giving us recommendations.
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    • Therefore I want to talk about vaccination, thaat I think is the most important preventive measure who affects every single person in our country, especially children and senior citizens.
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    • Therefore, I want to talk about vaccination, thaaddress what I think is the single most important preventative measure who: Vaccinations, something which affects every single person in our country, especially our children and our senior citizens.
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    • From my point of view there are some vaccines that could be the best option for our health because its prevent high mortality rate illness.
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    • From my viewpoint of view there are, some vaccines that could bare the best options for maintaining our health because itsthey prevent high -mortality -rate illnesses.
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    • Moreover , I think it´s an excessive measure to vaccinate the population for influenza every year.
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    • MoreoHowever , I do think it´s an excessive measure to vaccinateion of the population every year for influenza every yearto be an excessive measure.
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    • It is for that reason that I think government should recommend but giving freedom to decide everyone the things that we think are better for us.
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    • It is fFor thatis reason that I think, I feel that the government should recommend, but givingleave us freedom to decide everyone the things that we think are better for uwhat we think is best for ourselves.
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