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  • IELTS task 2 ( Please correct mine )

  • Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society.
  • Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this.
  • Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
    • Parent and teachers both play on important roles on children.
    • Teaching children to part of the society is necessary.
  • This is because when children grow up, they will have their own lives.
  • In my opinion, boys and girls can learn to be good adults of society through parents and teachers.
    • Parent are the first teachers for children.
    • Their believe and the ways of life must affect their children thoughts.
    • If fathers and mothers are responsible and considerable people, children will absorb good habit from their parents.
  • Some children imitate what their parents do, although they do not realize it is right or wrong.
  • Parents not only teach children to be good people but family also be their good model.
    • However, children do not only spend all day with their family.
  • They also spend their time in school with friends and teachers.
    • In school, teachers and friends are the influence people for children.
  • They have to learn how to make new friends and how to get along with people who come from different families.
  • Children have to adapt themselves to live with people.
  • Moreover, they cannot do everything they want because they have to follow school's rules.
    • School seems to be a great place for student to learn how to behave when they are in a society with various background.
  • School is not the place that children can obtain some knowledge and experience but school is the great place that makes children to be good people.
  • In conclusion, children can learn how to behave by their parents at home and by spending time with teachers and friends at school.
  • The most important factor is both parents and teacher must be good models for children.
  • Teaching children how to behave and get along with people in their surrounding is essential for their lives.
    • If they learn these things from home and school, I believe children can be good member of society.
  • Thank you for your correction.

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