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    • Gender enroll to university

    • Every year universities accept many people for different subjects and there are no preferences for universities authorities what subject should be repleted more male or female.
    • In this unregulated situation some subject may be repleted more male and other may be repleted more female.
    • To change this one it is possible to accept male and female in equal.
    • There is huge number of jobs in the world.
    • Some of them are more appliable for men and other for women.
    • Therefore, the situations is normal when universities accept more people of one gender.
  • People chose their study in compliance with their future and abilities.
    • If universities accept equal number of male and female it would lead not enough places in faculty for people who are more suitable for certain study and job.
    • For example, it needed to accept 20 people for some female study.
    • University takes 10 women and other must be men.
  • Thus, women who have more chances to finish education more successfully than men should be rejected.
    • But in modern society equal rights between men and women are claimed.
    • In this case it should be better accept equal number of men and women.
    • In conclusion, I do not agree that universities should accept equal number male and female because different genders have different characters, physical abilities and preferences.
    • Thus, this number in subjects can not be the same, otherwise, it is possible we will have staff who is not good in his job.

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    • Every year universities accept many people for different subjects and there are no preferences for universities authorities what subject should be repleted more male or female.
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    • Every year universities accept many people for different subjects and there are no preferences for universities authorities what subject should be repleteduniversities have no preference whether they get more males or females for a subject.
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    • In this unregulated situation some subject may be repleted more male and other may be repleted more female.
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    • In this unregulated situation some subjects may be repletedhave more males and other may be repletedsome may have more females.
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    • If universities accept equal number of male and female it would lead not enough places in faculty for people who are more suitable for certain study and job.
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    • If universities accept equal number of male and female it would lead not enough places in facultythe workforce for people who are more suitable for a certain study and job.
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    • In conclusion, I do not agree that universities should accept equal number male and female because different genders have different characters, physical abilities and preferences.
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    • In conclusion, I do not agree that universities should accept equal numbers male and female because different genders have different characteristics, physical abilities and preferences.
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    • Thus, this number in subjects can not be the same, otherwise, it is possible we will have staff who is not good in his job.
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    • Thus, this numbe amount of different genders in subjects can not be the sameremain this way, otherwise, it is possible that we will have staff who isare not good in histheir job. ¶
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