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  • Throughout this century the role of fashion has changed significantly and the majority of people want to be in trend of fashion.
  • Some people consider that the follow fashion is the loss of individuality, while others perceive the fashion as an essential part of their lives.
  • It is a well-known fact that in general, celebrities make fashion.
  • After they show up in public or on television wearing some color or shape of clothes, a lot of their fans and admirers try to copy celebrities` choice of dress.
  • Sometimes, such a blind imitation becomes silly and ridiculous.
  • Fans don`t care about whether this dress suit them or not, the most important for them is to look like a celebrity who they admire.
  • Moreover, after fashion makers announce new trends in fashion, every “stylish” woman loses a lot of her time and money in order to be in trend despite of her age and body shape.
  • However, not only women become victims of fashion, men have become addicted to it.
  • If casual style is fashionable in this season, men will change all his clothes in accordance with the trend.
  • Clothes, watch, shoes, cars have already become a sign of social and financial success, and hence, none wants to look worse or to have less than another.
  • The fashion is also widely spread among children.
  • If someone in the group has IPhone, other kids will tearfully ask their parents to buy it.
  • When one girl in kindergarten wears a pair of earrings, other girls will happily pierce their ears in spite of any pain to look as stylish as the first one.
  • In conclusion, I would say that, if copying and imitation is a normal feature of character for young children, it is abnormal for adults.
  • Every person is an individual who can look fabulous without copying others.
  • In any case, it`s better to look tidy in suitable clothes than ridiculous in fashionable ones.

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