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  • Throughout this century the role of traditional skills as well as our lifestyle has significantly changed.
    • The majority of people considers that there is no need to keep some skills alive because we live in the century of technological revolution.
  • Personally, I think that we should improve our modern skills on the base of traditional ones.
    • The modern technology has changed our live enormously.
    • Increasing the productivity of work and saving out time, technology has become substantial part of our lives.
    • The first thing that should be noted, is that hand labor was substituted for technological labor.
    • This significant novation allowed economies of countries to develop faster than in the past.
    • Nowadays, work in plants and factories has become easier and more productive, while traditional skills became less valuable.
    • However, there is no equipment that works with no people`s management, hence, people`s skills will be useful and needful forever.
  • During the technological revolution, traditional skills were developing in accordance with modern requirements.
  • Moreover, traditional skills improved with the help of technology.
    • For instance, in present tailors are able to produce more qualitative and beautiful clothes using sewing machines.
  • Needless to say, due to technological development even our lifestyle has changed.
    • Operating different appliances we can do house choirs faster and save time for other duties or family members.
  • Taking all these points into consideration, I would say that development of technology stimulates traditional skills to progress, but not to die out.
    • Machines, equipment and appliances is operated by people, hence, our skills and lifestyle will always improve and develop in accordance with the requirements of modern life.

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    • The majority of people considers that there is no need to keep some skills alive because we live in the century of technological revolution.
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    • The majority of people considersbelieve that there is no need to keep some skills alive because we live in the century of technological revolution.
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    • Increasing the productivity of work and saving out time, technology has become substantial part of our lives.
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    • ITechnology has become a substantial part of our lives, increasing the productivity of work and saving outr time, technology has become substantial part of our lives.
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    • Nowadays, work in plants and factories has become easier and more productive, while traditional skills became less valuable.
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    • Nowadays, work in plants and factories has become easier and more productive, while traditional skills have becaome less valuable.
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    • However, there is no equipment that works with no people`s management, hence, people`s skills will be useful and needful forever.
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    • However, there is no equipment that works with noout people`'s management, hence, people`'s skills will be useful and needfuled forever.
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    • For instance, in present tailors are able to produce more qualitative and beautiful clothes using sewing machines.
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    • For instance, in the present tailors are able to produce morebetter qualitative andy and more beautiful clothes using sewing machines.
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    • Operating different appliances we can do house choirs faster and save time for other duties or family members.
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    • Operating different appliances we can do house choires faster and save time for other duties or family members.
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    • Taking all these points into consideration, I would say that development of technology stimulates traditional skills to progress, but not to die out.
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    • Machines, equipment and appliances is operated by people, hence, our skills and lifestyle will always improve and develop in accordance with the requirements of modern life.
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    • Machines, equipment and appliances isare operated by people, hence, our skills and lifestyle will always improve and develop in accordance with the requirements of modern life. ¶
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