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    • Introduction : Diapo 1 et 2 : For starters, the presentation I will be showing you on the trip goes as such.
    • I decided to make a trip with my sister.
    • We chose as destination London.
    • This trip will last 5 days from february 20 to 25, with the budget of 1500 euros.
    • Throughout this presentation we will explain the different procedures and the things we need for the trip, as we watch the display here.
    • We will present you at first time "means of transportation to the town" that is to say our starting point and the means of transport used to get to our destination, then we will present the documents necessary to perform this travel and to enter the country.
    • Afterward the things we will bring in our luggage, then the means of payment to be used, the place where we will be accomodate, the means of transportation in the city, the places we will visit as well as entertainment, and to finish the gifts that we will offer to our families when we return in France.
  • Diapo 3 Our departure will be from the University of LENS, we’ll take the bus to the train station at about 6:30 am .
  • Diapo 4 After that we’ll take the train to London at 6:44 am.
    • But the train ticket we bought, has stops.
    • That said We'll get to Lille Flandres to 7:34, then we should wait 1 hour for the train to Lille Europe at around 8:36, to finally arrive in London at around 8:57.
    • We bought the ticket of the train from the website “Voyage-sncf” for a total of 195.80 Euros.
    • Once we arrive at the train station “Saint-Pancras” of London , we’ll go to the FAIRWAY hotel which is situated near the train station.
    • And this is why we chose this hotel.
    • Our return will also be done by train, the departure will be at 6:50 of the saint pancras station we arrive at Lille Europe around 9:30 to catch the train to Lille Flandre toward lens to 10:19, and arrive at the destination at 11:10 Diapo 5 Once at the station St.
    • Pancras, we go to the hotel on foot, as it is only 3 minutes.
    • Once outside the station, we go straight on WHSmith street, we Turn right onto Euston Rd/A501 then, we Turn left onto Argyle St and the Destination Will Be on the left.
    • Diapo 6 : Before explaining what we do, once arriving at the hotel, I go first, to show that we will bring with us to make this journey in the best conditions.Indeed, some documents are crucial to perform this journey and enter the country so we will take with us our passports, identity cards, our train ticket, wich is a round trip ticket, and an european social security, in case of such as disease incidence, Diapo 7 : regarding our luggage, we will take our toiletries, wherein it contains toothbrush, washcloth, soap, hair brush, shampoo, a camera to take pictures that will be our memories , underwear, pants, skirts, our tablet, which will allow us to stay in touch with our families via wifi and of course shoes.
    • Diapo 8 : As regards our payment, we will use our credit cards to pay for our train ticket and buy gifts for our family, we will pay by check our bedroom's hotel, and in liquid metro tickets as well as visits we will do during this trip.
    • Diapo 9 et 10: Now I will present you the hotel where we will accodate.
    • We book room's hotel on the site booking.com" Why did we choose this hotel?
    • Simply because it is near the train station as I've said before, but also for its economic side, we have the breakfast included and free wifi, double room, but the downside is that c is shared bathroom, for a total of 417 euros for 5 days.

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    • Throughout this presentation we will explain the different procedures and the things we need for the trip, as we watch the display here.
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    • Throughout this presentation we will explain the different procedures and the things we need for the trip, as we watch the display here.
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    • We will present you at first time "means of transportation to the town" that is to say our starting point and the means of transport used to get to our destination, then we will present the documents necessary to perform this travel and to enter the country.
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    • WFirstly, we will present to you at first timthe "means of transportation to the town" that is to say our starting pointwhich includes our point of departure and the means of transport used to get to our destination, t. Then, we will present the documents necessary to perform this traveljourney and to enter the country.
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    • Afterward the things we will bring in our luggage, then the means of payment to be used, the place where we will be accomodate, the means of transportation in the city, the places we will visit as well as entertainment, and to finish the gifts that we will offer to our families when we return in France.
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    • Afterward the things we will bring inWe will discuss our luggage, then theour means of payment to be used, the place where we will be accommodated, the means ofour transportation in the city, the places we will visit as well asincluding entertainment, and to finish. Finally, we will share information about the gifts that we will offer to our families when we return into France.
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    • That said We'll get to Lille Flandres to 7:34, then we should wait 1 hour for the train to Lille Europe at around 8:36, to finally arrive in London at around 8:57.
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    • That said We'll get toWe will arrive at Lille Flandres ato 7:34, then we should. We will wait 1 hour for the train to Lille Europe at around 8:36, to fin and we will eventually arrive in London at around 8:57.
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    • Once we arrive at the train station “Saint-Pancras” of London , we’ll go to the FAIRWAY hotel which is situated near the train station.
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    • Once we arrive at the train station “Saint-Pancras” of“Saint-Pancras” train station in London , we will go to the FAIRWAYairway hotel which is situated near the train station.
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    • Our return will also be done by train, the departure will be at 6:50 of the saint pancras station we arrive at Lille Europe around 9:30 to catch the train to Lille Flandre toward lens to 10:19, and arrive at the destination at 11:10 Diapo 5 Once at the station St.
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    • Our return will also be donbe by train, the. Our departure will be at 6:50 of the sfrom Saint pPancras sStation we. We will arrive at Lille Europe around 9:30 to catch the train to Lille Flandre toward lens to 10:19, and arrive at the destination at 11:10¶¶Diapo 5¶Once at the station St.
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    • Once outside the station, we go straight on WHSmith street, we Turn right onto Euston Rd/A501 then, we Turn left onto Argyle St and the Destination Will Be on the left.
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    • OnceWhen outside the station, we will go straight on WHSmith street, we Turn right onto Euston Rd/A501¶then, we Turn left onto Argyle St and the Dour destination Will Be on the left.
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    • Diapo 6 : Before explaining what we do, once arriving at the hotel, I go first, to show that we will bring with us to make this journey in the best conditions.Indeed, some documents are crucial to perform this journey and enter the country so we will take with us our passports, identity cards, our train ticket, wich is a round trip ticket, and an european social security, in case of such as disease incidence, Diapo 7 : regarding our luggage, we will take our toiletries, wherein it contains toothbrush, washcloth, soap, hair brush, shampoo, a camera to take pictures that will be our memories , underwear, pants, skirts, our tablet, which will allow us to stay in touch with our families via wifi and of course shoes.
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    • Diapo 6 :¶Before explaining what we do, once arriving at the hotel, I go first, to show that we will bring with us to make this journey in the best conditions.Indeed, some documents are crucial to perform this journey and enter the country so we will take with us our passports, identity cards, our train ticket, wich is a round trip ticket, and an european social security, in case of such as disease incidence,¶¶Diapo 7 : rRegarding our luggage, we will take: our toiletries, wherein it (containsing toothbrush, washcloth, soap, hair brush, shampoo,), a camera to take pictures that will bo store our memories , underwear, pants, skirts, our tablet, (which will allow us to stay in touch with our families via wifi) and of course shoes.
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    • Diapo 8 : As regards our payment, we will use our credit cards to pay for our train ticket and buy gifts for our family, we will pay by check our bedroom's hotel, and in liquid metro tickets as well as visits we will do during this trip.
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    • Diapo 8 : As regards our payment, wWe will use our credit cards to pay for our train ticket and buy gifts for our family, w. We will pay byuse a check our bedroom's hotel, and into pay for our hotel booking. We will use liquid metro tickets as well asfor the visits we will domake during this trip.
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    • Simply because it is near the train station as I've said before, but also for its economic side, we have the breakfast included and free wifi, double room, but the downside is that c is shared bathroom, for a total of 417 euros for 5 days.
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    • Simply because it is near the train station as I've said before, but also for its economic side, we have the breakfast included and free wifi, double room, but the downside is that c is. It is also economically favourable as our booking includes breakfast and wifi. It is a booking for a double room. Unfortunately, we must shared a bathroom, for a total of 417 euros for 5 days.
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