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Tekstong galing sa theBird - English

    • Children work

    • In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work.
    • Some people regard as completely wrong.
    • While others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility.
    • Discuss both these vies and give your own opinion.
    • Nowadays, in many countries, children involved in paid work to gain a financial support for their families.
    • However, weather is good for their development and relaxing the law on children to engage any type of job is a controversial issue.
    • Defenders of child labor argue it is a beneficial for their future lives.
  • Others are sceptical of its advantages.
    • Some claim children will gain a valuable experience and extend their knowledge of particular job in their childhood that might need in adulthood, it stimulates them to reach their goals and be independent as they learnt to take responsibility during the job time, appreciate parent’s work and understand the real value of money.
    • I personally insist that if children undergo job it kills their potential energy of studying as their performance at school is getting worse because they cannot manage their time between job and education.
    • And there is large proportion of white-collar and blue-collar workers never have worked before age of eighteen or twenty and they achieved what they had been aiming for.
    • In addition, workforce of children are usually factories job which cause experience healthy problems, expose horrible condition in workplace, they breathed air full of dust, oil and soot, working in very hot weather, rather than the job duties that may acquire work with large, heavy and dangerous equipment which could occur death incident.
    • Furthermore, lack of communication with adults in workshop leads to have introverted, diffident children In conclusion, our children’s prospective of live is completely different from ours, their happiness and sadness depending on toys!
    • They are venerable to face the painful and stressful of jobs.
    • We should permit them to taste the wonderful and sweet meaning of the life.

Pakiusap, tumulong sa pagtatama sa mga pangungusap! - English