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    • It is argued that children would learn more from teachers than parents after they receive education, no matter in academic performance or social sills.
    • I agree with this this idea, although it is important to recognise the role parents play in children’s social development.
    • Teachers who have specialistic knowledge are more likely to help students make progress.
    • Because of systemic training theoretically and practically, teachers know how to capitalize on learners’ cognitive abilities, making it easier to pass on knowledge to students.
    • This makes students be willing to make a effort on studying and be possible improve their academic performance.
    • While parents may find it difficult to help their children on, such as explaining some questions or triggering children’s enthusiasm of learning.
    • The rules set by teachers help students shapen their social skills which enable them to communicate with their peers effectively, and children are cultivated to adhere to rules, being responsible members.
    • By constrast, because families which do not like schools having a social atmosphere are less likely to provide children with opportunities to enhance their social abilities.
  • On the other hand, parents are also an important factor in children gaining social skills.
    • Parents are children’s role models, for example children know they should show their respect to the elderly when their parents are taking care grandparents.
    • Families also decide children’s extra-curricular activities, such as taking part in barbecue and parties, exposing to a variety circumstances.
    • Children can practice social skills in these activities, thereby they can have an improvement on socialization.
    • In conclusion, teachers can effect children efficiently, but the importance of parents in children’s development should not be underestimated.

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    • It is argued that children would learn more from teachers than parents after they receive education, no matter in academic performance or social sills.
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    • It is argued that children would learn more from teachers than parents after they receive education, no matterboth in academic performance or social sills.
    • It is argued that children would learn more from their teachers than their parents after when they receive an education, no matter inimproving their academic performance os as well as their social sills.
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    • I agree with this this idea, although it is important to recognise the role parents play in children’s social development.
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    • I agree with this this idea, although it is important to recognise the role parents play in children’s social development.
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    • Because of systemic training theoretically and practically, teachers know how to capitalize on learners’ cognitive abilities, making it easier to pass on knowledge to students.
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    • Because of systematic training theoretically and practicallye, teachers know how to capitalize on learners’ cognitive abilities, making it easier to pass on knowledge to students.
    • Because of systemic training theoretically and practically, teachersThey know how to capitalize on their learner's cognitive abilities, making due to their systematic training that involves both theory and practice. This makes it easier to pass on knowledge to students.
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    • This makes students be willing to make a effort on studying and be possible improve their academic performance.
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    • This makes students be willing to make an effort ton studying and be possibley improve their academic performance.
    • This makeallows students to be willing to make an effort on studying, and be possiblecreate the possibility for them to improve their academic performance.
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    • While parents may find it difficult to help their children on, such as explaining some questions or triggering children’s enthusiasm of learning.
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    • While pParents may find it difficult to help their children onwith some things, such as explainanswering some questions or triggering children’s enthusiasm ofabout learning.
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  • 문장 7
    • The rules set by teachers help students shapen their social skills which enable them to communicate with their peers effectively, and children are cultivated to adhere to rules, being responsible members.
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    • The rules set by teachers help students shapen their social skills whichthat enable them to communicate with their peers effectively, and children are cultivated to adhere to rules, being responsible members.
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    • By constrast, because families which do not like schools having a social atmosphere are less likely to provide children with opportunities to enhance their social abilities.
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    • By constrast, because families whichthat do not like schools having a social atmosphere are less likely to provide children with opportunities to enhance their social abilities.
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    • Parents are children’s role models, for example children know they should show their respect to the elderly when their parents are taking care grandparents.
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    • Parents are children’s role models, f. For example, children know they should show their respect to the elderly when their parents are taking care grandtake care of their own parents.
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    • Families also decide children’s extra-curricular activities, such as taking part in barbecue and parties, exposing to a variety circumstances.
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    • Families also decide children’s extra-curricular activities, such as taking part in barbecues and parties, exposing them to a variety of social circumstances.
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    • Children can practice social skills in these activities, thereby they can have an improvement on socialization.
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    • Children can practice social skills in these activities, therebyus they can have an improvement onimprove their ability to socializatione.
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    • In conclusion, teachers can effect children efficiently, but the importance of parents in children’s development should not be underestimated.
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    • In conclusion, teachers can egreatly affect children efficientpositively, but the importance of parents in children’s development should not be underestimated.
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